To the greatest man alive,
I have here a surprise.
It’s not the biggest thing in the world
Or as pretty as a pearl.
Just a little poem I made
To show that I love you.
No, this is not a silly charade
But I how I feel in my point of view.
You’re the best thing that’s happened
And I’ve never felt happier
To be by your side
Even though I’m clumsier
You’ve cared for me so
And I can’t seem to do better
Than what you’ve done for me so far,
Not even with this letter.
I can’t stop loving
The way you make me feel
When your arms wrap around my waist
And the moment seems surreal.
There are so many things
I could list off, as you can see.
Now, I know that this is weird but will
You go to Turnabout with me?
A silly little way
Of asking someone out,
But you should know that
I’m like this with no doubt.
I hope this poem
Brightens up your day
And if you say yes, then
“I love you” you’ll say.
Author notes
now, on the 24th line "You go to Turnabout with me?", it's a dance at my school. Homecoming is when guys ask girls out, and Turnabout is when girls ask guys out. my bf doesn't like to be invited by phone because he says it's not formal enough, and this probably isn't either, so i thought i could tie it in with this.
A contest entry
- rite me a poem for the one u luv by a means to an end.
385 points, ended February 15, 2007, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think! think he'll like it?
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You shall write more poetry soon!
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I agree with the previous reader. Cute and gets point across. BHolzner
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"But I how I feel in my point of view."
I think the first I shouldn't be there. but other than that this was a beautiful piece and I really enjoyed reading this. Great job, keep up the good work. : -
hmm...a bit unwieldly in placs, but the allover sentiment is cute, and it cetainly gets your point across...not bad, all in all
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Awsome
If I got a poem like this. It would be worth more then all the gold piled or jewels captured..Just one awsome and great write..5 stars
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this was a fantastic write. it was very smooth and made for very easy reading!
it is beautiful to read a happy heart felt piece for a change, i have read some interesting pieces the past few days, but this one is genuinly precious.
keep up the great writes. you have a definate talent
cheers
til
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this is a great poem. i loved how it flowed and i liked how cute it was. i really liked the first and second stanzas. great write!
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this is precious. i remember feeling that way about someone. now, i only wish the 'certain someone' would place his arms around me and say what you have said here. thank you for sharing this with me, you wrote it so well that you had me picturing the entire scene of you standing there. viyanna rosemarie
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