You said you're mine but didn't mean it
Our love just started, that's what I thought
Ultimate call of duty and fall
Courage,fight and then an ending
Our love just started, that's what I thought
Ultimate call of duty and fall
Loving me, loving me not
Dead phone calls, hating revolt
Karma it was, or just things' way
I love you, that's my disaster's fate
Loving me, loving me not
Loving me, loving me not
Making up your face in my mind
Eager to be with me in life
Better do die, then give a try
Ultimate call of duty and fall
This is the end of hot hell's mall
I love you, that's my disaster's fate
Courage, fight and then an ending
Our love just started, that's what I thought
Ultimate call of duty and fall
Loving me, loving me not
Dead phone calls, hating revolt
Karma it was, or just thing's way
I love you, that's my disaster's fate
Loving me, loving me not
Loving me, loving me not
Fighting the soul's involves
Our love just started, that's what I thought
Reaching the limits of scary fault
You said you're mine but didn't mean it
Our love just started, that's what I thought
Ultimate call of duty and fall
A contest entry
- The Contest Which Must Not Be Named by Orual.
700 points, ended February 22, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Awwww So Sad
very detailed write.Like looking at the petals on a flower saying in a wishing though,Love me~Love me not.
picking each petal off till the last one reveals to one the truth they don't want to hear.
Blessings
~Cheryl~ -
Interesting and very vivid. You met all the requirements for the form, which is an accomplishment in and of itself. The rhyme was a little weak, but I've come to expect that. Not a very popular aspect of the form, I've found. My only real complaint is your spelling of "disaster." You might want to fix that.
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edited the spelling...sorry 4 that... and thnx for commenting...:-)
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