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Oh kiddo..

 

Oh kiddo,
How many times have I told you
The mask goes over your face
And why do you carry that hairspray
I think we're suppose to use mace

It seems each time we start a job
Your face turns all shades of pink
Your voice crackles like snap-rocks
And your brain forgets to think!

I remember on our last heist
You tripped over a piece of gum
Because you wore your daddy’s shoes
And yes; that was a wee bit dumb

But you know that I love you dearly
We’re partners in crime to the very end
And always remember, my precious Queen
I’m not just a partner; but also a friend


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(Please read Queen's response poem)

http://allpoetry.com/poem/2619234

 

 

 

 

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Queen is my partner in crime
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2619234

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  • nigelartist
    March 31, 2007
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    Its up to you!


  • Dark-Princess
    February 27, 2007
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    CONGRATULATIONS too!


  • Dark-Princess
    February 27, 2007

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    lol...This is cute! Thanks for the smile~
    Dark-Princess


  • OopsIAngstedAgain
    February 20, 2007

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    This is really cute, you are an awesome poet. Hey, thanks for the comment. I loke your icon thing by the way.

  • Warrior7
    February 16, 2007

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    LOL Excellent

    I have read both your poems and i think you both have done an amazing job with this contest. This poem made me giggle i loved it


  • catz Moderators member
    February 12, 2007

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    This is way cute, I can hardly wait to read the response.
    It sure looks like you gave good advice, now lets see if your partner can take it.

    Good job, and good luck in the contest

    Dee


  • Sarah957
    February 12, 2007

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    Brilliant!

    Tash and I are still looking for inspiration, so I thought I'd check and see what else had been written... I just finished reading the duo of poems now. You guys did great! I think you worked well together. I hope we can come up with something to challenge it

    Sarah


  • individuality gold member
    February 12, 2007

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    just read them both now a tag team of poetry i wish that you have good luck in this contest you have entered. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...


  • capricornpoet
    February 11, 2007

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    whimsical crime story

    Love in a crime, twist of prose sublime, this was so
    whimsical and had a color of sweetness....you painted
    crime time like a sweet fable....fumbling partner
    seems you were robbing a candy store ..a one time score.Lovely tale with a valentine feeling.


  • Partners In Crime
    February 11, 2007

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    Just great..and funny...

    The best part:
    But you know that I love you dearly
    We’re partners in crime to the very end
    And always remember, my precious Queen
    I’m not just a partner; but also a friend

    Yes, real partners
    Good luck to you in this contest



  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    February 11, 2007

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    Excellent......

    LMAO...tripped over the chewinggum..hahahaha

    And the picture Go Granny Go is just sooooooooooooo funny....hahahahaha
    I liked this very much

    Great teamwork I see here
    XXJeannette


  • ma belle
    February 11, 2007

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    Ooh how adorable! Ouchie! Partners in Crime..I'm loving it. The retort was cute as a button. All my best, dear Shalott sis. ♥ Belle


  • The Poetic Angel
    February 11, 2007

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    this was funny ..good luck in the contest im off to read queens responce lol ~cheeky~ x


  • Love of a Bullet
    February 11, 2007

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    This was cute, but I sense a potential for it to be hysterical. Definitely message me if you decide to flesh this out some... I chuckled at the begining.

    Good luck in your future works. :-)

    ~Das


  • queen Moderators member
    February 11, 2007

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    I think we have done it Very good job we do make quite a pair

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