Crumbling beneath my feet
The demon I could not defeat
Till I received a helping hand
That steadied me so I could stand
Without the help of someone new
I just may not have made it through
But someone’s watching out for me
I know they are, though I can’t see
Perhaps an angel in disguise
Guiding me with words so wise
Rising from the darkened ashes
The life I’ve known before me flashes
I’ve come so far, I won’t quit now
I will hold true to this one vow
I know I’ll still encounter tears
That I will always have my fears
But in the end I will be fine
Serenity will soon be mine…
A contest entry
- a place to put some pre-loved poems. by DancingRed.
300 points, ended May 20, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"I know I’ll still encounter tears
That I will always have my fears
But in the end I will be fine
Serenity will soon be mine…"
You have such...whats the word?
You express encouragement and Postitivity so easily...emotionally
Reading these lines, I know that a brave, strong soul had written it
Reading these lines make me think and feel
Reading these lines make me believe that I too can find serenity
Great write
A good feeling to it
Keep them comin!!
Much Love!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Thank you so much!
I wrote this while trying to deal with the guy who broke my heart and inspired my poetry. Had it not been for a friend that I met at this time I don't know where I would be now.
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This poem tells of such a beautiful hope, and your words are held together with a lovely strong rhyme. Thanks so much for entering.
DancingRed.
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oh wow insense and powerful very deep too i can kinda related to this poem well parts of it at any rate very awesome piece
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thank you very much
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Demons
Most of my life I have battled demons. Some real, some imagined including a life time of nightmares. If you have beaten back the demon then freedom shall truly be yours. Wonderful write
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Wow a very powerful poem. I could see the inner strength that you posses. The language too was strong enough to evoke those feelings that you'd laced throughout this piece! Your will power comes out full blast well done!
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your poem is like a sister poem to my "risen from the ashes"! great write! i love inspirational poems
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Beautiful strength! You had me gushing with pride for you. I love how you expressed it so well. It really flowed off the page and took me by heart. Heartache can be so tough, but you licked it good. BRAVO!
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WOW... woo me
short and sweet! great poem, again!
i do not see anything wrong with it!
are you sure you wrote these.... they are really good poems... young one! lol... j/j. they are really good. keep it up the more you write, the more you grow into your own style and that my friend is a great thing! -
LOVE IT!! weh hew!
This rocks!! I love the feeling of do not give up, and the acceptance that life does not guarantee constant happiness. One must truly work at life, for life is a never ending test. YOu give up, you are ov-er! Keep trying and the more serene one can possibly be.
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this was amazing it actually brought tears to my eyes what can I say Im a weak guy this was very powerful you can feel the emotions flowing through every verse of this piece it was brilliant and beautiful
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Thank you very much, this reaction is the goal of my writing.I want to make others feel it, relate to it, live it. I greatly appreciate your comment
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Very nice poem!! I enjoyed reading it. I like the rhyming. Nice rhythem throughout the entire poem. Great Job on this one. Keep up the good work.
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i like this poem =) it a good motivation.
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Well done. :)
This was beautiful. Thank you for sharing. I love pieces that contain a message of hope.
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