moved out
is now with autonomy that can want the mommy
or mamma
to be the phonecall
no pr
to talk about roommate
or just without
not gussied up as gossip, no glamour of needing mother.
Am apartment's walls look like the faded denim
of the chest who raised her
and she'd like kangaroo care for an adult
but puts her head in her own cloth and sees shafts of black
yet that changes to grey and white with tears and rising
and left a T-shirt for letters dialing speech
but it wouldn't be ear muff but speaker colors
from that particular lining up with a parent
and she wasn't lonely without buttons of her blouse.
Author notes
Whoa, this is for an anonymous contest -- don't use author's name in comment. Wait for replies to be after judging is done. Whew, thank you.
This isn't done in the direction for good luck, just fun.
A contest entry
- What's in a picture? by Angierie.
300 points, ended February 11, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
? = ?
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The picture of the woman with the glasses - and this interpretation - everyone sees something different and writes about it in different ways. That being said, you write about your interpretation in a different way. Need some time to climatize....
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projections on a photo
grannyeri (no toughening but with lower cases like lowering oneself to watching kid's eye view),
You see caught perspective in my scribble,anyway, like I believe language can move similar to handwriting, which can be acclimated to!.
The figured out part is sometimes past the imagery,. Thanks for looking. I don't have anything fresh I'm working on, as I'm getting ready to leave AP.
~Carolyn
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Aw this just is filled with a sort f sadness that makes one feel a sudden since of loneliness.If this is what you were going for then you have achieved this emotion very well.As this is what was revealed to me through you write.Missing days that have long gone only to want them back in a small way.I hope I understood this right!
God Bless
~Cheryl~
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not too swift, found an if
Cheryl (like with arms down without tildes on both sides... you've made a gallery of your printed name even!),
I am thankful you didn't have a lanky look at my poem but neither just I like it comment then but can communicate at what flanked this as an experience to keep by your side. Yes, "Missing days that have long gone only to want them back in a small way.I hope I understood this right!" The flipsidedness of of opinion in and out of parent's prescription might show some truth through emmotion like when it might be felt why don't you help me no more which prompts the tone to the meaning of the word when grammar for some might seem to attenuated with any. Yet the very variance might emphasis of pulling away whose discotography isfor straightening. Hence, my tool of pictures inside the sentences was used when I tried to get it understood "sudden since of loneliness" which could be said from the reader. Well done between us?
I was in reply mood last night but got busy, which I was again this morning but your rating my note on your same contest work flashed your name and I kept it on my accomplishable check-off list. All this activity doesn't make me forget I am getting off AP any day now, aside from deleting my stuff decision.
6:19 tremendously enjoyed, alliteration and no lie, back to turning pages even on how God blesses.
~Carolyn
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