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Red Roses

The sun sprinkles down
On dew kissed grass
Tiny prisms cast aglow
In the early morning light

Two lovers entwined
Legs tangled, pressed close
Green eyes smiling into brown
As your lips capture mine

Red roses sitting near
The scent caressing our senses
The beauty of crimson petals
Could never compare
To you...

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  • marmel
    May 28, 2007

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    Beautifully descriptive. Paints a happy and romantic picture in one's mind. Nice and good choice of background! Please comment on my poem.


  • Ephiphany
    May 28, 2007
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    Beautiful Imagery...

    Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem....

    Two lovers entwined
    Legs tangled, pressed close
    Green eyes smiling into brown
    As your lips capture mine

    Red roses sitting near
    The scent caressing our senses
    The beauty of crimson petals
    Could never compare
    To you...

    Ephiphany


  • Foxydaze14
    May 28, 2007

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    This is a very lovely piece. It has a nice flow and style to it. You wrote it so vividly. Well done!


  • MrsPepper
    May 28, 2007

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    lovely writing

    It was a joy to read this and I love the beauty and romance in this write and I love it even more because it is so romantic and sensual without being sappy.


  • Blood13Rayne
    May 28, 2007

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    its really nice, if you like kinda poetry. i eman i dont, so maybe thats why i can see that it doesnt flow.
    its sumthing about ur words that makes it sharp at sum parts.


    • MirandaNicole
      June 2, 2007
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      no offense, but if you don't like that type of poetry you probably shouldn't waste your time by reading it. Thats why poems are categorized. Thanks.

      ~Miranda


  • grannyeri gold member
    May 27, 2007

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    So easy to read and understand the sentiments you have expressed so well in these lines - liked the flow, and the images one gets when reading your words. Very sensual and loving, written for someone special, that is loved very much,


  • ibsons hysops
    May 27, 2007
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    and i really mean that, so there!

  • ibsons hysops
    May 27, 2007

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    not 4 ME*love! in my humblest of great opinions, i have to say there is just not enough love in this great big old world for everyone! so let the springs and geysers all spout as much LOVE as they can to let all enjoy!


  • Calvin-Hobbes
    May 27, 2007
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    Too Lovey-Dovey for me!

    I said it in my verdict.


  • Pureisolation
    February 14, 2007
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    i really enjoyed reading this poem. at first it imagined two people in love expressing it but at the end i could imagin the suroundings and how you were comparing the two. great write! i love the way you chose your words so i could really feel like i was there...it truly is pretty


  • Rianna Bear
    February 14, 2007

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    Great imagery!

    My first impression here, is this is some real good lovin'. I love your ending...all the beautiful things in nature (which we have no control over) is compared to the beauty of love of another...another thing which we have no control over: love. I also like, that if you put the first line with the "To you..." it makes such a sweet dedication! Did you notice that!??
    Lovely,
    *R

  • Tez
    February 13, 2007

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    Beautiful

    This is lovely Especially to read on valentines day! Short, sweet and simple. Isnt it curious how everything always seems more beautiful when we are in love?

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