Dripping in crystals
Silver and Gold,
I allow myself to be weighted by these treasures.
Chains and shackles, made of love,
Made of grace,
Beautiful and deadly.
The pendant I once tipped onto my palm
From the folds of an envelope.
With shaking hands I examined it's sterling elegance,
It's Snakelike shape,
And fastened it around my neck.
Just One more burden I was happy to bear.
Two bands,
One black-as-night,
The other bright as day,
Circling my fingers,
making my hands heavy,
Leaden,
Binding me to unrequited love.
Constant reminders now,
That I was less than the best.
No More than a shameful wretch,
A wreck of my former self,
Just as Pathetic as they once said.
And now I see it all fall away,
Silver into ashes
Diamonds into dust.
No lover wears them now,
No lover's gifts are they.
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This is sort of how I felt about the idea of pack necklaces or tattoos, and I've always thought this when I saw you wear the same necklaces day in and day out... jewelry makes wonderful mementos, but it works just as well worn as it does in a box or on a shelf, and wearing every relationship you have in metal makes it feel like chains...
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basically what needed to be said has been said already. *feels beaten* i'll just say that i really like the phrases 'silver into ashes' and 'diamonds into dust' i <3 this poem a lot. i must go bookmark it!!
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I like this poem...
It feels a bit darker than you usually write though love...
But in anycase its a great poem.
Even though I must wonder who is responsible for its inspiring...
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Blargh, I hate you and the way you can make extended metaphors work...
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i love the symbolism you use in this poem-jewelry as shackles. i connected them to the word 'unrequited', as if those gifts do not mean love, or rather, acted as a substitute. is that what you meant? also, that was a brilliant ending-with those last two cynical lines. i have such a hard time ending poems, but you do it perfectly. an awesome poem-it just got better and better as i read it.
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yes, that is basically what i meant...and as for the ending, well thank you and im glad you liked it. i usually have a lot of trouble with endings, but every so often a good one just sort of happens. ^_^
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