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Take Me Home

Take Me Home

 

 

Your Greatness, how I long for you,
as waves crash upon boulders
and leave driftwood
for my warmth.

 

 

 

It is hollow here in my world;
for the peace of Heaven, I long,
tears that mimic sea water
that fall to my breast
some that lie softly upon my lips,
my tongue wiping them away.

 

 

 

Ocean spray caresses my face,
my arms,
ever so softly,
knowing now, I am assured
that what I had designed
in my heart
would come to fruition.

 

 

 

These lips that once were dirty,
the sordid words they spoke
now history to tell,
cleansed by the putity of Christ;
these hands that once fondled
to relese pleasure and intimacy,
now unsoiled.

 

 

 

Prayers that linger in my heart,
verbalized openly as I wait
for God's request of me.

I await my Savior to take me home.

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  • piccola silver member
    February 14, 2007

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    the phrase about leaving driftwood for your warmth..I thought that was beautiful. It was well deserving of silver...or do you think you should have won gold; it's hard to tell from the comment.


    • pattyann4500
      February 14, 2007
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      Oh, mercy, no! I left that because I was actually nearly speechless that I won anything. I really do appreciate such an honor. You had a lot of entries, and I tend not to think my work is good enough. I absolutely was stunned. I thank you again for my win. Hugs, Patricia


  • Truthful Princess
    February 13, 2007
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    Dear anonymous awesome person,

    I love you! And this poem is breathtaking!


    • pattyann4500
      February 14, 2007
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      Dearest anonymous, sweet daughter, thank you. I love you, too.


  • owlishhunter
    February 13, 2007

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    A vivid and personal picture you have exquisitely painted here, my friend! I adore that second stanza!! Good luck on the contest...you have a wonderful write indeed in this one!!!

    • pattyann4500
      February 14, 2007
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      Thank you, Kris, for your comment on this. I'm sorry I couldn't reply until now, but the contest is finally over. I so appreciate your being such a loyal reader. Hugs, Patricia


  • Sherry gold member
    February 11, 2007

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    Sadness with longing

    This had a feeling of much sadness of wanting to leave this word yet the longing for you to await a better place beyond the pain you face. I hope however you will have brighter days and joys even through the depression and tears and those blessings will keep you strengthened. You bring a lot of love to others although I know your not alone in wanting to go home many do and if one surely knows this then they have a peace. I hope you will not leave anytime soon for life is a gift and although you wait I am one those who isn't ready to leave this world. Because I am scared of not being there deep down. I am so glad you have a relationship with the Lord so much you feel that security and love of him within you sweetie. You wrote a creative piece using the ocean to decribe your emotions which made this rather a unique part of your soul. Love, Mom

    • pattyann4500
      February 14, 2007
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      Since this contest is over, I may now thank my readers appropriately. Thank you so much, Mom, for your comment. I love you.


  • My Darkness
    February 10, 2007

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    this is kind of like something i would write, only i'd make it dark, or maybe i've written something like this before.. lol.. i don't remember! But anyway, this is a great write, one of my favorites actually.. good luck in the contest!

    • pattyann4500
      February 14, 2007
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      Thank you, Sweetie. I'm now thanking everyone since this contest is over. I'm so glad you liked this one, and I appreciate your support of my work. You're such a beautiful daughter. Love, Mom


  • Whoochi gold member
    February 10, 2007

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    This sooo deserves a trophy...what a great conversation as you desperately call out to your God...the picture is right on with the write...Bravo!

    • pattyann4500
      February 14, 2007
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      Since this contest is over, I may now thank my readers appropriately. Thank you so much for your comment and your lovely wishes. Hugs, Patricia


  • W B Burkholder
    February 10, 2007
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    very nice and spiritual piece, loved this

    • pattyann4500
      February 14, 2007

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      Since this contest is over, I may now thank my readers appropriately. Thank you so much for your comment. Patricia

  • piccola silver member
    February 10, 2007
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    tears that mimic sea water
    that fall to my breast
    some that lie softly upon my lips,
    my tongue wiping them away.

    This is beautiful. Thank you for the great entry.

    • pattyann4500
      February 14, 2007
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      Thank you so much for holding such a lovely contest. You have no idea how many times I had to erase comments before realizing I couldn't. I appreciate your comment very much. Hugs, Patricia


  • Molassis
    February 10, 2007

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    WOW!!!! I'm honestly blown away with this piece *insert your loving name here... this is stunning, gorgeous really.

    Amazing flow and rhythm in here... love the way you take this from 'dirty-ness' to purity...

    I'm sure t his is a winner.. it just has to be for it is exquisite writing my dear one!

    Much love to ya *insert name*!!!!

    ~Melissa

    • pattyann4500
      February 14, 2007
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      I (insert name here) want to thank you, Sweetie, for reading and waiting so patiently for my reply. I so appreciate your on-going support in my writing. You mean a great deal to me, my lovely Melissa. Love, PattyMa


  • Sweet Jane
    February 10, 2007
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    Gorgous

    So gorgous
    nice poem


  • Bedroom Eyes
    February 10, 2007

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    I like spiritual writes very much, and there is a shining truth in this one. Christ cleanses us all of our sins if we just believe in Him.

    Beautiful words of faith and hope...the best of luck in this contest

    • pattyann4500
      February 14, 2007
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      Since this contest is over, I may now thank my readers appropriately. Thank you so much for your continued support. I can't write if there isn't someone to read it. Hugs, Patricia

  • PalmettoSky
    February 10, 2007

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    this is so nice. This (and you probably do not want to hear this) was really cute. It was quite original.
    I loved this.This was done very well. good job for throwing it out this way. I think all of these other talented writers will identify with the idea here. Your writing is almost conversational and I value that in prose because it makes it more reachable. The rhythm and rhyme are lovely. A sense of warmth and light came over me while reading.

    • pattyann4500
      February 14, 2007
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      Since this contest is over, I may now thank my readers appropriately. Thank you so much for your comment. Hugs, Patricia

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