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dream keeper

in the dark of night
i take flight
to make a stand and fight
against the thing of fright
that haunts the children in the night..

A contest entry

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  • trixey
    February 16, 2007

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    awww. thats sweet and i admire that u werent thinking of a girl just children. they do need protection more than ny1. great! ^^


  • Pixie Stix
    February 11, 2007

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    Sweet poem! I love how short and to the point it is! Quite descriptive considering the length. Made me happy!


  • Mainzy
    February 10, 2007

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    very dark, but well written, a very nice piece. Its short but gets the point out there. Well done and good luck in the contest.


  • Ryno
    February 10, 2007
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    Interesting. Seemed soft of like the rhyme was forced, and this poem felt a little 'empty' you could've/should've stolen a couple more lines to say some more meaning. Though, thanks a bundle for your entry!~
    ~Ryan~