Time is my enemy
It mocks me in my hours of yearning
laughing in my face when sleep
fails to guide me into a dream state
making dawn too heavy a curtain to lift
It controls me, constricts me
I am but a prisoner of its will
trapped by hours, minutes and seconds
that twist my mind into balls of clay
forming and then transforming
my thinking into scenarios
of self doubt
Pushing its cold hands forward
when we are together
becoming hopelessly paralyzed
until our next meeting
I think I shall smash its face
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The personification works beautifully, with or without the accompanying image. It's a lovely work about your feelings, and I think they come through so nicely in a form other than the bluntly straight forward...
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Spectacular
I usually don't enjoy reading poems that have no rhyme scheme, but yours did just as well (and better) without it. The frustration of the helplessness all humans are subject to in regard to time . . . this is a topic many, including me, dare not to touch. Your defiance worked brilliantly with your sedate rhythm; something I have never come close to doing. Your closing contemplation of attempting to defeat time made a beautiful rest. I adored this poem, you truly are talented.
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Holy moly, Nor....absolutely incredible writing.....this.."Time is my enemy
It mocks me in my hours of yearning
laughing in my face when sleep
fails to guide me into a dream state
making dawn too heavy a curtain to lift"
dang if that is not totally evocative.
And the ending...wait...can I help? Let us go about the world smashing clocks...what a mission to aspire to!!!!
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Beautiful intensity here! Well spoken and sophistocated thought woven into an angsty sort of premonition for the time held. Creatively penned with a unique picture that complements the poem quite well. Great piece!
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Another great write from my soul sistah...but yes, we honor Father time, for without it , we would not have our life experiences to share with others....love your take on this.....Muahhhh
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Nicely written. You have touched on some feelings here many of us have had, and did a wonderful job of expressing them beautifully. I look forward to reading more from you.
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An amazing piece full of intense imagery and so beautifully written! Great job! Smiles, Terry
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Joy and reality flowed through me, just wanting to be exposed to the true world.
Simboy
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sectacular the flow was amaizing i reall enoyed this
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