As the Sun became Heavy-
It Collapsed into the Sinister Sea.
Darkness Devoured the Light-
Shifting Perfection to Reality.
A silky, dark blue Blanket
With tiny Satin Fires- Enclosed Me.
So bright and so attractive,
They Deviously Entice me.
Conveying not only Hope,
But a colossal Glimpse of Sympathy
Keeping me from the Darkness-
And Allowing me to see.
This pattern will continue-
Never ending- will this prototype be.
The Sun forever Heavy-
Collapsing into the Sinister Sea.
By Lianne Lowe
A contest entry
- The Poets Write by Starrchild777.
975 points, ended March 8, 2007, 18 entries
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-- Why all the capitalization? Its unnecessary and detracts from the poem, actually makes me look for some bizarre acrostic.
-- Are they suppose to be dashes or hyphens? A dash is 2 hyphens placed side by side. A hyphen is used to join 2 words or split a word at end-line. Please make sure you have what you really want in the correct place. -
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Emily Dickinson
I have recently been reading Emily Dickinson's poetry book for my English A.s ... and I decided to add her random capitalization into my work. She capitalizes the important words in her poems, nouns and verbs. She uses only one hyphen in her poems not to join the words together, but to add effect and so that the reader knows how to read the poem.
sorry if i spoke out of line
thank you
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