Bleach me red,
Stare me out, splatter garish love over lurid skies.
Contrast life,
Hurl stars in eyes until love has made you blind,
Break me with a shutter, camera flash, pierce my mind,
Flick a switch, colours blast, widen gap,
Taken too far, trapped within
flimsy photographic paper
Author notes
the colours seemed a bit tooo... bright, if you know what i mean.
option 12
A contest entry
- Picture Inspirations by DJ Harley.
600 points, ended February 18, 2007, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Broken R! by Ms Raneika.
600 points, ended March 9, 2007, 88 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - contrast by unraveled.
600 points, ended April 3, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Fantastic; love the imagery and powerful phrases you've used. I love how you say 'hurl stars in eyes' -- it's a brilliant image.
And did you mean 'too' in the second last line?
Congrats on winning all these trophies.
DancingRed. -
I don't think the colours are too bright, I think that they are just right! This is a intriguing write; all those ideas crammed in tight! Thanks for entering my contest, and to you I wish all the best!
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AMAZING. I love that you crammed all these ideas and pictures into my head in only eight lines. That takes skill.
Your entry pretty much fits the contest prompt, I think you could have had some more peaceful feeling in there but you didn't do badly at all. I LOVE the words you chose, such as "garish" "lurid" and "flimsy"
Excellent. Thank you for entering.
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I love your vivid imagenation through out this piece...quite amazing thanks for entering my contest much love, Raneika
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yes!
Looking at the picture, you have used it really well in your imagery. The metaphors are brilliant and you have made it clear what you are talking about! If that makes sense. Hope this helps, good luck in the contest. -
I also think this is a great interpretation of the picture. I loved the way you used the bright lights to incorporate them into this. Wonderful mataphors in this!
Nicely donr indeed
Good luck to you in this contest.
Gaylene
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i love the way you view the pic, the color of the formation you viewed, special the way a photographer would view this pic thru his lens. very nice.
good luck in the contest.
John
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Yes, I know what you mean. I felt almost blinded reading it. Good stuff!
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