There is so much in this world to live for.
You wouldn't think so to look at me.
So many years I have wasted longing to be free.
I carry all my burdens ever were I go.
I try to hide them so no one else will know.
I don't go out to wedding and I don't go to shows.
Every year it gets worst the fat just grows and grows.
I have no joy in fashion to me they are just clothes.
Every year I try again but my God it is in vain.
I cant go on holiday because I'm to fat to fly.
Now my heart is in pain and I cant even try.
And some times I feel so useless I want to sit and cry.
I think I might go of my head sometimes I wish that I was dead.
I cant walk round the corner I have to get in the car.
I cant go any were because every were is to far.
I don't like to be in photos they make me feel so sick.
And when there is a camera its the only time I can move quick.
I am sick of all the pointing and the hurtful things they say.
believe me if could I would magic it all a way.
But I know I cant so I have to live to fight another day.
Author notes
I am on another diet again and i thought i would write this about my pain.
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This was a stance on the prompt most others haven't taken, so it was quite interesting to hear another point of view.
However, you need to seriously look over your punctuation, and I can't figure out what your rhyme scheme is at all - it's kind of all over the place.
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A heartfelt and sincere composition---Very honest with your feelings--
Best of luck in the contest!
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aww babe!
i absolutely love the title for htis since it fits perfect
i could definitely relate to this and i think a lot of other people can/could too
thanks so much for entering my contest
laura <3 -
Your write here has expressed so much emotions of what you're going through...I feel for your pain.
I think you did a wonderful job though...letting go of all the emotions you have inside. I do hope things get better for you.
Thank you for entering and Good Luck!
debbie
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i know that i had said that i didn't want writes of this nature, but this is so allowed. it is so painful to read this. the only reason i had said that is because i was scared of the entries i would get. but it is a situation that is present in everybody's life. whether it is the person, or somebody they know. i know this may sound stupid to you, but i, on the otherhand, am really tiny now and i honestly hate it. (you're probably saying this crazy b-word)...i wasn't overweight before this (i actually was when i started high school and was teased about it, so i know both way)...but i was always bigger. when i had my surgery (laparoscopy) i had caught pneumonia afterwards and couldn't eat a thing for almost a week causing me to lose all the weight. and over a year later i cannot gain it back. i know people strive to be skinny, but its actually killing me also. there's been rumors that i am on drugs and anorexic and so much more, when i have never been either. my family has even accused me of the two...its hurtful to hear the things people say. altho i am the opposite i feel your pain. people judge by appearances and it needs to stop. some people cannot help it. we need to look at the beauty within...there are many diets out there to try, you just need to find the one that is right for you. if you need anything i am here. i am always free to lend an ear.
this piece was so heartfelt and sad, it brought tears to my eyes. like i said, i am here. thank you for entering such a heartfelt piece of pain and disappointment that so many can relate with. best of luck to you in both the contest and in your diet.
~bee
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this is a deeply pain filled and personal write my firend, it sounds to me as though you need a little help or support and not try to take the world on alone
i wont insult you by saying *stick to the diet and all will be fine* for i do understand that it is not just the diet but the whole outlook on life you need to change.
dont try to lose wieght with all these rediculous starvation diets nor get upset when you dont lose any or little sometimes.
what you do need to do is change your whole outlook on your weight,first yes you may be fat but this is not the end of the world,pick a day in the next few days to use as the first day in your new life.do NOT think to your self *i am on a diet* but *i am going to be slowly changing my life now*
and so for the first few days eat whatever you usualy do but i want you to walk slowly at your own natural pace but as often as you can..i dont expect you to walk outside but in your home/yard or appartment this may sound silly but it will help,dont keep a diary of what u eat or when dont keep weighing yourself you dont need to be obsesively on scales. just do this for a few days.
the next step is to drink a large glass of water befor you eat ANY meal,this will not only help to detox your body and make yo ufeel more healthy but it will help your stomache to feel a little fuller befor meals ,now i still want you to eat when you are hungry ,stupid to starve yourself that wont make you feel good ! but remember only eat after a glass of water and also dont just sit and eat anything not a meal or a snack ,without having small sips of water as you eat,
after each meal brush your teeth too (yeh i know we should but not many people actualy do it after EVERY meal, but this will help your mouth to taste fresh and you may even find that you dont want to snack out as often for you will either not want to have to go brush again or you wont want to lose that fresh taste,dont forget to keep walking now! as much and as often as possible, dont expect instant transformations in fact try not to think of it as a weight loss but as just your new way of life to feel fresher and healthier.as this contest has the poets I D hidden from me i dont know if u are male or female, either way treat yourself as a new person from THIS moment, pamper yourself, keep your hair and skin as fresh and clean as you can, look after this body that you seem to hate so much for it will be transformed soon and you want to look and your best or you will be thinner but just as unhappy!
contact me again in a couple of weeks of doing this
please and i will help some more.
and NEVER worry if you *slip up and binge out* its not the end of the world
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Love this write...so many can relate to your pain...remember...It is not the weight that makes the person but the soul, your beauty flows from within, so let your talent shine...sunny
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I am sorry for the conflicts you go through as you diet. (I have the opposite problem). You depicted very well the emotional 'hurts' of trying to lose weight. Good job.
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