Oh, trapped within this heartless cell,
Behind cold iron bars.
Waiting for my love's return,
From fighting wars afar.
Oh please, my knight, my only love,
Come quickly here to me!
And save me from this wicked place-
I die on morrow's eve!
God make you fleet of foot, my steed;
We'll ride hard this night.
Through marsh and fen, o'er empty plain,
'Ere the sun burns bright.
Accused of crimes, though innocent-
My lady lies in waiting.
Bound inside a tiny cell,
Her honor thought forsaken.
My spirit cries out unto God,
Oh harken to my plea!
Give my beloved wings of eagles,
That swiftly he may fly to me!
My heart beats wild within my breast,
My ears keen and alert-
Oh hark! What music fills the air?
Hoofbeats pound the earth!
Trial by combat will decide,
The fate of my lady fair.
Whispered infidelity,
Falsehood rends the air.
I take the field in armor bright,
My sword unsheathed in glory.
I will defend her honor-
I will champion her story.
Clutching tight cold iron bars
My heart leaps at the sight-
My knight in shining armor stands
My honor for to fight.
Oh, how my thoughts are racing!
This moment, bittersweet-
For though my love I see at last,
His death I fear he'll meet.
Mighty slash and lunging blow,
My armor holding fast.
I engage my lady's foe,
Standing tall until the last.
Though she stands accused of crimes,
She would ne'er commit.
I will wield this noble blade-
Let God decide the truth of it.
The truth! The truth! Oh, shall I say?
The truth shall set me free!
My innocence shall lend him strength,
Before him, foes shall flee!
For lies have placed me in this cell,
And lies have turned the key-
For God and fate will heed the truth,
Bestow on love, the victory.
A final cry escapes my lips,
I fall upon my knees.
My foe lies bleeding on the field,
My lady is set free.
She is my life--my only love,
My reason to draw breath.
For her I would brave Hell itself,
In her name, I would face death.
The prison walls have crumbled!
My knight has set me free!
My innocence is proven,
The guards in fear do flee.
He is my life--my only love,
Our spirits are entwined-
For him I would face even death
For in him, life I find.
Come with me, my angel;
Let us leave this place.
For I would show you love again,
Sunshine upon your face.
The sun is warm and golden,
And though I love its glow-
Your arms are what I long for,
So come, love...let us go.
Author notes
Sokarjo was kind enough to lend her pen and write with me on this piece.
A contest entry
- Collaborations of Love For Valentines by Poetry and I Inc.
600 points, ended February 14, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I love how this is told from both sides. The imagery is magnificent. This has a medieval feel to it. The emotions are felt throughout the piece. A very good collaboration. Very Nicely done. Congratulations on the gold.
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You two make a good team.
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Fantastic job on this one. The structure of this poem was admirable, and the collaboration on this piece was well thought out and well done. Really good job.
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Beautiful
What I like the most about this poem is the two perspectives. Very good idea! The language you used really works well with the fantasy theme, and it flows.
Personally I find it hard to rhyme without forcing it, but your rhyme seems so natural! Darn it, I wish I could do that! Anyways, nice poem
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I absolutley loved it! It was so deep...beautiful adjectives and great rhyming. I love the story poems like this, it was great and I absolutely love it!
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This is unbelievable! Its so beautiful and empowering with love and strength for love. This is a fantastic poem!
My spirit cries out unto God,
Oh harken to my plea!
Give my beloved wings of eagles,
That swiftly he may fly to me!
My heart beats wild within my breast,
My ears keen and alert-
Oh hark! What music fills the air?
Hoofbeats pound the earth!
This makes me so anxious, I feel as though I am there feeling everything she feels. This is truely a great write! Well done!
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Holy jeez this poem is amazing! It flows sooo well and the choice of words are perfect! The story captivates you and is not too short or too long. It's just a really awesome poem!
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I love this piece, I see why it won gold... it's great. I love the first two lines the best. ♥ Erin
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perfect structure perfect alliteration perfect rhyme and perfect meter perfect word choice perfect sentence structure in every perfect line in every perfect stanza make for a perfect perfect Gold Trophy.... doesn't it?
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Gold Indeed....
Hey Lone Defender, this was a wonderful entry and I am so Happy to see that you did win.
Gr8 entry
God make you fleet of foot, my steed;
We'll ride hard this night.
Through marsh and fen, o'er empty plain,
'Ere the sun burns bright.
Accused of crimes, though innocent-
My lady lies in waiting.
Bound inside a tiny cell,
Her honor thought forsaken.
My spirit cries out unto God,
Oh harken to my plea!
Give my beloved wings of eagles,
That swiftly he may fly to me!
My heart beats wild within my breast,
My ears keen and alert-
Oh hark! What music fills the air?
Hoofbeats pound the earth!
Ephiphany
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I've revisited this just because ......
.... it's such a good story. The way you and Sokarjo collaborated to bring this piece of work about is simply amazing and I think the pair of you should write another one. The style is perfect. -
Awww!
The emotions you express through your words and style are absolutely amazing and deep. I love the story itself as well. It's Great! -
Very well done on your gold here. The details and feeling of this poem was incredible. Very well thought out and a true delight to read.
Congrats to the both of you.
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WOW!!!!!!
that was amazing!! good job!
the whole thing...wow.
applaud
♥ Meleah
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This is a beautiful piece. It’s often hard to capture images so sharp and so vibrant that they actually paint a portrait for the reader to glimpse upon and savor at length, but you have certainly done that here. Don’t let the ink of your pen run dry!
♥ Touchof1der
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For a collaboration this had a distinct easy flow, your styles of writing compliment each other well. There is no wonder why gold was awarded to this piece, well wrote and thank you for sharing this little story.
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"I will defend her honor-
I will champion her story."
"For lies have placed me in this cell,
And lies have turned the key-"
"For her I would brave Hell itself,
In her name, I would face death."
"For in him, life I find."
Again, you tell great stories, and your rhyming scheme and form are flawless. Nothing ever seems forced, all is natural, like you were born to write these poems, to share with the world. Absolutely fantastic.
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This was like a story out of Camelot. A great tale of love and desire. I have never fully attempted this style of writing but I have been working on and off on trying. You captured a time when valor, bravery and love were all one.
Soulful Woman
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This is a fantastic piece and the story so well told. I love tales of knights and maidens so every word was a great pleasure to read. The style you've used to write it, telling the story from both sides is a wonderful idea. You've created a masterpiece.
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great
very well written. i enjoyed reading it
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Oh, I love it! Very Arthurian and fantastical and passionate and action-filled. I love the language--morrow and fen, o'er and 'ere and hearken. I like how the last 8 lines are split, rather than having 8 lines for each of them, like you did in the rest. Very splendid!
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This is beautiful, both of you. Thanks for sending me the link Sokarjo. Actually, it almost made me cry. Brought back a lot of dreams.
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Awww, I'm so glad you liked it, Ida!
Thanks for reading it. 
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Wonderful and Perfect
Wow! Now this is true writing. Written seemingly w/ so little effort. 2 be apart of ur ink, 2 sample a portion of ur ink, I could do it no justice. I loved the whole poem: has great depths and explores real love for one another! Amazing and I'm awestruck. thx for sharing and good luck in contest! -theQueen"
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