I was a happy girl
but then it was turned around
now I'm alone
I am lost
My heart is gone
I bleed for love
I have been nice but I over did it
now Im sad inside and out
Bleeding myself out.
Feel no love at all
Why was I so mean?
I feel so empty inside
My heart is gone
I feel nothing inside
The love I lost
Now I feel alone
Why was I curel?
I blew my chance
I shouldn't even live.
My heart is gone
My
heart
is
gone
A contest entry
- Tears from my Valentine by Sunday Rain.
330 points, ended February 14, 2007, 7 entries
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thanx
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beautifully written. I was happy once too then the woman I love rejected me so now I'm stuck hating myself and everyone else. I hope you find love someday and don't end up like me and trust me you don't want to. anyway excellent job!!!
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Alright,
Alright, I have just re-read it, and good job, but my only real problem is the I was a happy girl,
That I just didn't care for,
but
Good luck! -
I like it. It is similar to a few of my poems...[read them if you want]..... but it was good.
I wish you luck in your contest -
Alright,
Alright, I really have enjoyed readin' this poem, but you can use things like I'm sad, or I am sad...
but you did a good job with this, and I do like the background,
but the only thing that I really didn't care 'bout was the I was a happy girl,
I don't know, it didn't really appeal to me...
but good luck! -
very interesting
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