With chaste ache of the willing
her lips purse to the fire
of worship, in words ~
Defined
Coquette for the somber
brash gypsy to staid
her sarcenet drapes
and draws out ~
Desire
Inquisitive, in earnest
her ear presses into sighs
in perfect punctuation ~
Design
Her cheeks brush
bold noblesse
but she dallies alone ~
in paramour memories'
soft fade.
Please tell me what you think
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forgot some of these!
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hmmmm , i think i will toss my hat into the ring and tweak this as well...
With chaste ache of being easy
her lips puckered weally hot
on her knees as usual, gabbing ~
Really
Flirty for the emo
brash gypsy to the tight-assed
her soft curtains
... draws out her ~
Urges
Big eyed, in earnest
her ear let's the wind pass right through
in perfect punctuation ~
Doodle
Her cheeks brush
boldly with an "Im better then you" feeling
but she happily fools around all alone ~
In prostitute memories
soft fade.
My dear Petal..who in this world can do it better then you?
It's revealed by our own hand...
galfalfa
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My my my ...
I am inspiring, ain't I???
and thanks for the brain fart.
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While cvillelisa felt this as either I felt it as both as I read. Flickers of movement as an old movie would do with music playing out of doors. Notes lifting and fading into gentle echo's. The fleur-de-lis always reminds me of a beautiful flower rising up to meet the world. Opening its petals with eloquence and grace as to charm the beams of warmth from the sun. So proud to have arisen, yet so humble in the knowledge that it is just one facet on and in the stage of life. I don't know that I articulate myself well here. But this does read with a soothing voice, a whisper of a voice that holds so much strength and wisdom one cannot help but to be awed by it. As always Jane, you write like Mozar composses.... sheer perfection. You cannot change one word, for to do so it would lose all meaning and your song, your heart song would have been sung off key.
~Michelle~
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Perfect punctuation. Well that certainly leaves me on the outside of this one.
Define
Desire
Design
soft fade -- musical. Though could certainly be a film soft fade but to me, it was more musical.
Adore the opening lines. Chaste ache. And lips pursing is always so .. pretty. I can't resist it.
Longing Lonely -- dangling on air.
You wrote. Thats very good.
Lisa
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More of a stumble back to the posted word, I think. It doesn't yet shine for me but we all must take those shaky steps, no? And with you there to gently keep me safe, how could I not, lisa?
J.
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Promise...sing
Soft fade the petals of the paramour
from courtisan through time until basse cour
as punctuation interrupts design
with scarce a sigh before life's final line ...
One hand clapping
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