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[Tears]

As her tears start to fall
she feels her hurt
through them all.

The hurt from him
the hurt from her
the  hurt from everything
within.

As her tears start to fall
she feels her hurt
through them all.

Within her tears
her life lies
The hurt, the truth
and even lies.

Within her tears
contain her wish
that everything within
would
disappear.

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  • poet18
    April 22, 2007
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    sad

    sad


  • Retrostyler
    February 10, 2007

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    wow!

    it's fantastic... I liked the way you featured the word "tears", it showed the situation "she" was... What I found really special are the lines "Within her tears
    her life lies
    The hurt, the truth
    and even lies." I find it amazing and insparational. "HER LIFE LIES":the most amazing line... I don't no why but I love it and I can relate... good job! perfect


  • Tiffany Turner
    February 10, 2007

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    This is amazing

    i love the way you have written this peice. it is amazing. it might be the fact that i feel this way at this moment but i am sure that is not just it. keep up the good work.



    ~:~Tiffany~:~