Eugena dances among the wheat,
Making the air churn;
While a confab of jays,
So set in their ways,(suddenly taciturn)
Contemplate her spinning, spinning,
Heel to toe, heel to toe;
And the radiant sun meets its own,
She's aglow, all aglow!
A sudden stop, she sideways glances,
A common thing when Eugena dances,
To look, and to perhaps espy,
Her mother, or some passerby.
But only I can true observe
From this my hiding place,
This effulgent show of art and verve,
And she with an angel's face.
Eugena's in love and tickled pink,
As she twists and twirls in time;
You wouldn't be far off to think,
That I wish that she were mine.
� 2004 J F Johnson
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lovely it really is im amazed
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This peice is so lovely, I was nearly brought to tears. The swaying of your words brought it to life for me. It has a whimisicle feel to it and gives one the effect that a lullaby might have on a babe. Soothing, and comforting.
terrific job.
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Dear KoS
And thank YOU for such a lovely comment on this poem. I'm very glad you liked it. It is about a lady at my job who I've had a crush on for what seems forever.
Yes, she's seen it and was tickled by it.
Thanks again for your thoughts on it.
John
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Smoothe flowing rhyme. A great write with wonderful imagery. I enjoyed reading it!
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Fantastic
I love the use of language here, it makes it feel so sincere and just lovely! A very sweet sort of affection for the subject and there is so much fun in the words as well, adding a sort of imagery and personality. This has great flavor.
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Thanks Daisy
Appreciate you taking a look at this, especially so late in the day!lol
It's about a girl I know at work. We don't see each other much anymore, but she was tickled when I showed her this!
Thank you again Daisy.
Are you the Daisy that the group America sang about?lol
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I'll bet she liked it, a poem like that is a definite compliment. I'm afraid there aren't any songs about this Daisy girl though... just a slight addiction to collecting flowers from roadsides and wearing them.
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Really like this TEO.
Lovely rhythm and words.
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Promise...sing
Eugena dances among the wheat ... perhaps amid ?
see The Nightingale Keats ... perhaps the self same song that found a path to the heart of Ruth, when, sick for home, she stood in tears amid the alien corn ... quoting from memory John ...
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A sudden stop, she sideways glances,
A common thing when Eugena dances,
To look, and to perhaps espy,
Her mother, or some passerby.
Yet if in love why roving eye
on passerby sends arrows shy ?
she should look where her heart entrances
and save for him her tempting dances
. Rewarded 8
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Hi Jon
I remember Ruth saying to Naomi, "Your people shall be my people, and your G-d, my G-d." When I converted to Judaism
from aetheism, I was told that I should concentrate on that verse. That it, more than any other, represented what I was about to do.
I will read Keats' Nightingale , Jon.
I'm aware how the word "among" seems a bit double-jointed
at that point. Out of maybe 150 people who read this, you are perhaps the second to recommend that I change "among"!LOL
But did you also notice, or not, that after the first eight-line hodgepodge, that the first quatrain was in a aa/bb sequence and the two subsequent are in ab/ab?
No one has ever noticed it, or at least they have not
mentioned it!LOL Were you aware of it?
Do you think that I've somehow,unwittingly, performed some leger d' main text-wise?
Again I will look at Keats to see if he has "set the standard" for cornfields and wheatfields.
(Please note: When I typed in "cornfields", my spell-check allowed it, but when I typed in "wheatfields", it would NOT allow it!LOL)
Thank you very much for dropping in, hope you have a pleasant week.
John
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Hey john!
She sounds like a sweetheart all right. Her name sounds distinctly like the town i'm living in right now--Eugene OR. Also my middle name(which will soon change)
Back to the poem: there is a grainy kind of innocent playfulness about this piece that i really enjoyed.
Erik
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Music and movement easily cross the road for us while referencing each natural participant with a little rhymed humor.Wonderful piece that is all your own. No crits here!
Hey Patty..........great job on the illus!
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Hi!
I don't see Pat on-line much anymore, but we swap e-mails now and again! If you'd like her e-address and don't have it, I'd be glad to send it to you. I don't think she'd mind. Thanks for taking a look at this!
John-Las Vegas, Nevada
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like a dance in summers wind....
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THANKS
Thank you very much Sandra. I think people like the impromptu, au natural feel of this. It seemed to me, at the time, the best way to describe it.
Again, thanks a lot for your thoughts on this, means a lot.
John--Las Vegas, Nevada
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Lovely!
I enjoyed this poem a lot. wonderful flow and story here. I also wanted to thank you for the comment/ complement on my work, I am glad you enjoyed them and once again I thank you for your prayers.<3 Less
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Listen! This was absolutely excellent!!!! It put me to mind of some of my favorite classical poets. The rhyme and rhythm were immaculate and completely without affectation. Truly I am so impressed, and want to know Eugena! You made here come a live! Can't say enough about how i enjoyed this.
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Cicadas
Glad you liked my Wheat Dance poem. thanks for your thoughts on it! Means a lot!
John
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Awesome! now this is poetry, it paints a really pleasant picture while entertaining my intellect with vivid verse. I love the story and the picture is really great.
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Dear D R
Happy you liked this one. It's about a gal I knew at work.
She liked the poem too when I showed her, though refuted a lot of the content!LOL
Re: nuclear attack...
Sign in school hallway reads...
CIVIL DEFENSE ADVISORY
"In the unlikely event of a nuclear attack, the federal law prohibiting prayer in public schools will be temporarily placed in abeyance until further notice."
John
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I love this! I love this tale of an admirer longingly watching the beautiful,dancing Eugena! Well done! Well done!
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Dear Elizabeth
Thank you for your kind words on my Wheat Dance poem earlier today. I still know the gal represented in the poem and she was thrilled when I showed her the poem!
Again, I appreciate your getting back to me with your thoughts on this, means a lot!
John-Las Vegas, Nevada
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For some reason, I was transcended back to the days of slaves in cotton fields where no matter how arduous the task, and how hot the sun, they still laughed, and dance.
Or of the times of Native Americans who had the need for rain in the dryness of the wheat fields, and their frenzied dances. The imagery here is stunning. The entire presentation is well worth the read. I enjoyed poet.
Hope you are well. It's always my pleasure when I get the chance to come by and visit. I love your writings.
Much Love Always ♥
Renee
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Dear Renee
If I'd known you were coming, I would have put out my best tablecloth and napkins!
But those bounty paper towels will have to do.
And although Bounty are the Quicker Picker Uppers, nothing "picked me up" like you visiting my poem today. A friend,
and Good Samaritan it appears, liked the poem, and recommended it.
Thanks again Renee. About the dance alluded to in the poem, someone told me that creation is a dance that God is doing.
You be good now! Glad you liked this little poem!
John-Las Vegas, Nevada
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A lovely story using simple words, reminiscent of long lost days of innocence. Well worthy of the spotlight. Excellent write.
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Great write! I love the sweetness and innocence of this poem.
The ending was a very nice wrap-up, by the way.
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So simple and so beautiful. I loved the rhyme in this poem, though i am normally not a fan of it. Every stanza flowed nicely and the story was vivid and sweet. Amazing job
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Hey Autumns
Thanks for your nice remarks on my Wheat Dance. I'm glad you thought well of it. It is about a girl, a lady really, who I've worked with for about 25 years. She was really tickled when I showed her.
Thanks again Autumns, means a lot!
John-Las Vegas
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Mairi
A lady friend and I had dinner last night with that girl and her boyfriend.The poem is a long story. -
A girl lost in her own, simple, solo buck-and-wing... sudden moments of self-consciousness... John, wonderful time, place, and scene-setting... You convey immediate feelings with this poem as succinctly as any haijin with a haiku.
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what beautiful imagery you have in this write. and Eugena dancing...you have such a romantic mind to pen this one! It is altogether lovely dear poet! I loved every bit of it
Mary
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This is a bit crazy but, I just got off the phone with a friend who told me we are going to dinner with Eugena and her boyfriend on Friday, and then I saw your remarks.
It would not be so strange except, I've never gone out with her in my life! Weird!
Thanks again for looking at my stuff!
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Beautiful
Very visual, I could see the heat, the wheat and Eugena dancing.
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Thanks for your kind words
Hello Del,
Is that Park Bench poem easy to find? I'll see if I can find it.
Appreciate your looking in on me!
John-Las Vegas, Nevada
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i love the imagery and the flow!
a great write indeed.
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THX RHB-X
Thanks for your thoughts on Wheat Dance.
If I'd known you were dropping by I would have straightened up a bit!LOL
It was very nice of you to say, means a lot!
Regards,
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no prob;]
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this piece has a great flow... so beautiful, and awesome visual! I love it!!!!
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Beautiful
I do love this poem in the childlike ways so often seen when the child never knows your there yet the innocents draws you in to enjoy the pleasures we as adults have left behind in the hurry to grow up .
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a beautiful piece, filled with wonderful images. I like the subtle shift in rhyme patterns. A thoroughly enjoyable read. Well done.
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Dear Rory
Thanks for the look see yesterday. Glad you liked Wheat Dance. I showed the real Eugena after I finished this and she was tickled.
Again, thanks very much! And Happy Thanksgiving!
John-Las Vegas, Nevada
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This was really wonderful! I loved the words that you used in it and the background was wonderful. You did a great job
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This has really great imagery, especially in the initial section. I also really enjoied the vocabulary that you used, though not as much at the end (perhaps because I don't know the word 'effulgent').
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I was feeling sad earlier, but this poem made my day. I can see everything said in this poem, it's beautiful. Thanks! =)
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I absolutely adore the imagery and happiness displayed in this poem! Its beautifully written. The flow and rhyming is fun and fresh! Fantastic! Loved it!
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Eugena must indeed be a sight to watch, all that dancing and swirling I love this delightful poem, it has a nostalgic feel to it and was a joy to read. Easy flow and nice rhyming
Pat did a wonderful job with your background... she's a friend of mine and a beautiful person to know along with being a very talented lady
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impressive
Wow! Nevada hotel worker! What an interesting life you must lead! I'll bet you got some really interesting stories to tell! You sure got some beautiful people signing your poem on this page. And now look what you get? An ugly old 63 year old beatnik! Thanks for the help with poor Joe smozy! I read "Melancholy" too!
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Dear Wes
Thanks for leaving the comments on Wheat Dance and Melancholy poems.
Do you remember the most famous beatnik of all? To our recollection?
Maynard G. Crebbs, from Dobie Gillis! Remember him?
Have not gotten around to your page again yet but I've got you on my "to do" list!
By the way, there is not much glamour in my job at the hotel, unless you like truck drivers and a good deal of
friendly swearing! I work on the receiving dock and have been there twenty four years so far. Though I did see Debbie Reynolds one time on New Years Eve, being towed to her room by security after partying with Rip Taylor after the show.LOL
Catch you later partner!
John
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I read this before, but didn't comment. I don't know why. I love the rhyme, the joy and even the gentle longing. As usual, John, you've scored 100 with this. I love reading your poetry - and I hate reading your poetry. I AM SO JEALOUS!!!! celtic queen
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Just simply sweet ...
and almost lyrical as if a tune were waiting 'round the corner to take your words for a spin! You touched ever so gently on endearment and that means so much these days. Observational loving brings such great rewards and the ability to appreciate another's happiness even more! Good write and while I hesitated to comment, seeing how you had sooooooo many, I think that you deserved another opinion as well.
joy
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Gorgeous...
A beautiful piece...
Has a reminiscing feel to it.
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This has a lovely light touch - and, in spite of what strike me as some slight technical flaws and infelicities in the choice of words ("tickled pink", in particular seems out of key!), over all it is, as another commentator said, charming, and the kind of poem that is apt to stick in one's memory...
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This was charming and so literate. Age watching beauty?? x Thank you. x
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You should have entered this in my contest. It would have been in the top three I think. I really enjoyed it. I like the background too. All very nice.
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What a happy carefree write. I really enjoyed the picture in words.
Lady Dragonwyck
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Fun
I liked the internal rhyme seen here and enjoyed the gentle way of the writer/watcher. Thanks for the read. I'm not sure that the repetitions work, they seem to hold up the flow?
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Dear Donald
I suppose it could slow down the flow bit, but it's not as if I had thirty verses more to read and an appointment to go to.LOL
Glad you gave it a tumble anyhow!
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There is joy in this piece, not the usual regret one wanting has. and therefore a unique take on yearning appeals.
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Moto gracie, Tony! Kind of a hodge-podge of forms but it seemed to work out.
?Thanks again!
John
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So very sweet with just the touch of sadness...That I wish that she was mine beautiful~Thanks so much for sharing
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Thanks a bunch!
I don't usually get that many stars!
I'm glad you liked this, because I meant that people might like it when I finished it.
The woman in the poem works down the hall from me at the hotel where I work. I don't think she believes me when I tell her that people are so enthused about her poem!
Don't think I've been but one time to Alabama, and that was to Mobile when I was hitch-hiking across the country from Florida as a kid.
Glad you liked this poem, means a bunch!
John-Las Vegas, Nevada
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i love the soft calm feeling this poem gives!
my favorite lines are
But only I can true observe
From this my hiding place,
This effulgent show of art and verve,
And she with an angel's face.
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Dear Dandelioness
Thank you for your comments on my Melancholy tonight.
It was nice of you to say.
Regards,
John-Las Vegas
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Wonderful
This poem evokes a sort of familiarity with me.
For whatever reason this poem makes me think of an old southern party, one that takes place at dusk to the sound of a jazz band.
You weave a wonderful tale. Great job!
~Phoenix
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Romantically beautiful!
I truly enjoyed this poem!
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Thank you AJ
Nice of you to comment on this poem tonight. Happy that you liked it.
Regards,
John-Las Vegas, Nevada
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exquisite.
There's always a fresh of breath air in your writes, and this one is no different. The magnitude of harvest is in this one, I could imagine fieold voles and hawks swooping down on them. The vitality in this piece shows what an outgoing sought on thinking you have. But then, women, like this would have done this to any man. Lovely work, Titus -
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Hi Tony!
Thanks so much for your taking a look at this. Glad you thought well of it!
I still am in contact with the young lady mentioned, and she was thrilled to see this written about her.
Hope all is well with you!
Love the pic you've chosen to accompany your things.
Be well Tony!
Best Regards,
John
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Me too...
Very nice! Eugena lives in your verse!
Love the last line. Almost wistful?
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You wouldn't be far off to think,
That I wish that she were mine.
What a perfect ending.
John
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Thanks Johnny!
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I adore the way you tell your story in rhyme. It's so fitting of her dance! There is an old fashioned freshness in your writing and the way you see her with a hint of wist. The poem sparkles! ~ Karen
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wow..i really love this poem, its probably one of my favorites
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Thanks DB23
Glad you liked Wheat Dance. Don't know what prompted you to read it, but I'm tickled you did.
I'm originally from NYC myself. I moved to Nevada about thirty years ago. I started poetry about five years ago.
Does your name, 23, have anything to do with the movie that is coming out?LOL
Well, thanks again for the look see, made my day!
Appreciatively,
John-Las Vegas-Nevada
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i really really like this poem...its different buit in a good way i would have to say that this is one of my favoret poems on allpoetry.... great job...
Caycee♥
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How heartbreaking! Unrequited love...so sad. You poem has great imagery, I can just picture a girl dancing and twirling around in the middle of a field on a prairie. Great write!
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