Look at me
your once
{{beautiful}}
f
a
l
l
e
n
((angel))
... now I'm just
your jaded {{whore}},
a n.a.m.e.l.e.s.s
nylon slut.
You carved your name
into my ((soul)) and
left me {{*bleeding*}}
>>black promises<<
cut-out ((deceptions))
&& [[hypocrisy]]
{{Technicolor}}
fishnet kisses
s.h.i.m.m.e.r.&&
glitter like neon
fragments of
s~h~a~t~t~e~r~e~d
.....hearts.....
You ((fucking))
l~i~a~r
You promised me
the stars, but all you
gave me were hollow
{{t.a.n.g.e.r.i.n.e}}
scented words...
Falling through the
[[r.a.i.n.b.o.w]]
of your deceptions....
the green of your {{greed}}...
your yellow &&
orange moments of
((i.n.s.a.n.e.r.a.m.b.l.i.n.g.s))
&& the black.and.blue
marks left by your
((ten fingers))
((choking)) on your
[[hollywood flavored]]
smoke rings&&
f.o.r.g.o.t.t.e.n
vows, empty words
full of toxic tales of
never...neverland.
You left me ((alone))
to come down from
my l.i.t.h.i.u.m
induced h~i~g~h....
You {{always}} made
my e.m.o.t.i.o.n.s feel
[[dirty]] &&
c.l.o.u.d.e.d
I used to ((lose))
m.y.s.e.l.f in your
s.p.a.r.k.l.i.n.g
diamond eyes...
That was before I
discovered you were
nothing but a...
{{Cheating bastard}}
Your c.o.l.l.a.r.
Her l-i-p-s-t-i-c-k...
Don't bother Baby,
I know what goes on.
Now.you.turn.to me.
Your lips
d
r
i
p
p
i
n
g
lies, like a broken
l~a~v~a~l~a~m~p...
Lies of l.o.v.e &&
.....{{lust}}.....
...and cocaine.
Hate was your
[[p.o.i.s.o.n]]
Vanity was
her sin....
Have fun with
your c.r.a.z.y
((bitch))
because Baby,
I'm gone and
you won't see me again.
I sincerly hope
((Ana))
w-r-e-c-k-s
your life.
Author notes
Okay, I used
Option 1 M&P - both modified a little.
Option 3 - all of the words
Option 5 - fuck off, goodbye
Option 8 - in a way...
O.p.t.i.o.n 9
Option 10 and 11 in my way.
A contest entry
- pretty[dirty] enough words. by noir eyes.
525 points, ended March 5, 2007, 36 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - & At Least Things Aren't Worse ♥ Show Me Dirty Pretty Please |x| by Midnight-x-Rose.
300 points, ended April 7, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I loved it
Very straight to the point. just needs the daggers handle to twist every now and then.
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Congratulations on your HM. It is well earned with this piece. You really brought so much emotion to this poem and covered so many options within the contest. It only goes to show you just how gifted you really are.
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Um yeah... That was pretty much amazing! I don't even really get the whole dirtty pretty thing, but your poem would have kicked ass even without it. Good job!
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Right on... This is an example of a wonderful dirty pretty piece full of the words, punctuation and thoughts that provoke that dirty but beautiful part of the brain that we keep to ourselves more often than not.
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You hold the key to a room that is in your mind and filled with all sadness and darkness, you unlock it and then you unleash it upon the screen.....great writing, intense darkness and pain, sis....
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Thanks bro. I write what I feel I guess. Heh....Writing is my therapy.
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The darkness in which you write is nothing short of incredable. As I see each poem unfold before me I always find something within it that I can relate to. I dare not comment on one or two lines that stand out because it would take away from everything else that dwells within your poem. I also love how you lay it out. It really draws a person deep into your poem. You are a true poet in ever sence of the word. Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you Daddy. I write darkness because it is what I know....And thank you for the luck. Love you Daddy
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Now.you.turn.to me.
Your *lips*
d
r
i
p
p
i
n
g
lies, like a broken
*l~a~v~a~l~a~m~p*...
Lies of *l.o.v.e* &&
.....{{lust}}.....
...and cocaine.
*Hate* was your
[[*p.o.i.s.o.n*]]
Vanity was
her sin....
Have fun with
your *c.r.a.z.y*
((bitch))
because Baby,
I'm *gone* and
you won't see me again.
I sincerly hope
((*Ana*))
w-r-e-c-k-s
your life.
ohhhh, the angst. i love this, i truly do. i can seriously feel all the hate & emotions wrapped up in this. AMAZING JOB. YOUU ROCK. =] -
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I'm glad you like this Dollface ♥
I was a little depressed when writing this...the chating bastard....Oh well, he can fuck off and die -.-
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Awesome
I love the way you use the words, and the format of the poem itself.
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Thankies, and I love you Baby <3 and
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