Basement floor, Sears sporting goods
Elevator doors open, floral hips swaying
Eye level as I trotted to keep up
I trotted everywhere then
And fell into cavern wonderland
Pulled off track by canvas, campstove, cot
Wondrous cloth home, so much better than
Blue electric blanket draped over card table
I wanted to show you; couldn't even find you
Maybe it was terror as I scanned vertical horizon
For any friendly face that cramped my bowels
White faced, you found me on the display toilet
Swinging my heels, solving my worst problem
Shaking head, you walked away...
Finally coming back, for a little while
A contest entry
- A metaphorical message to the missing by Dienush.
750 points, ended February 19, 2007, 18 entries
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This is very funny,
I can feel the redened face of your mother. i can't imagine what i'd do if it were me in the sitsution.
Great fun memories are made for this.
Slán Dolores.
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This is an interesting poem, though I'm not sure I understand what you mean. Thank you for entering.
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This is me, reminicing of my time with my deceased mother. I guess i need to strengthen the sense of loss. For me, not finding, searching vertical horizon, was foreshadowing the time she would be gone. And I just couldn't bring my self to say, "then you died..."
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lmao, good one! my son did that, in a show home... Funny story, well told, certainly made me smile! Jan
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OMG, toooooo funny...oh my lord, if my kids had of....wait....no..they didn't...whew...lol...
this is priceless, absolutely priceless!!!!
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When she snatched me off, she didn't even give me a chance to get my shorts up from my ankles. I was reaching with my free hand for them and hitting ground about every third step...
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my son has done just this. We laughed about it then and it's a family tale to be told many times into the future!! Lovely.
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OMGGGGGGGGGGGG too fricken funny...I can jsut see it.....whhhhoooooooootttttttt!!!!! I am officially into aboslute giggles....... no no great guffaws....
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