graceless winter chill--
frozen tears shatter on land
shards cut; blood is drawn
In a list
A contest entry
- nature~haiku by misticmoonlite.
950 points, ended June 22, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wowie. You write BEAUTIFUL short pieces. I am very impressed. haiku are so fun to do and yours flow so effortlessly. Very elegantly penned. Thanks for the share.
best wishes.
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Quite an interesting dark piece. Shows great creativity Thanks so much for entering my haiku contest. It's a pleasure reading your fine work
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Wow. You did a fantastic job combining the traditional concept of haiku (nature) and mixing it with powerful emotion. Best of luck in the contests.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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hm. very interesting, yet different concepts all put together in such few words. good words too. very good job and good luck in the contest!
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very dark but good write... good luck
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wow, this is dark but well formed, thank you for this entry...good luck
Linda
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A Note to all Contestants:
A Note to all Contestants:
Welcome to our contest and thank you for your entry.
It seems some contestants have not followed the rules or the theme of this contest. We have added an update at the bottom of the contest page – please be kind enough to read it and act accordingly. You have 3 days to do so, before we begin our critique. If this update does not apply to you, please ignore it.
We wish you all good luck and are eager to read and comment on your poems.
Rachel and Dennis
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Thanks for entering this contest, we were hoping that the subjects of the entries would deal more with modern, contemporary, everyday objects. Your participation is appreciated.
Dennis -
Excellent juxtaposition. Wonderful use of the season of 'winter'. Is the word 'frozen' needed really in L2 because L1 ALREADY contains the word 'winter'. Excellent use of punctuation at the end of L1. I like the contrast between the white winter and the red blood..Very very striking imagery!!! Nice use of assonance in the poem.
All the best,
Charishma
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This is real nice. I feel the pain of my past and trying to move past them. This is a really strong write. Good luck in the contest
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Seems though a nature-less senyru contest, we've both written to some theme of winter in our entries, Rocker. I can envision the image of this haiku, and though it's not very "pretty" as to the blood drawn, I suspect that was its intention.
Best wishes to you in the contest!
Jo
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