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Summer Storms

Sitting outside

 

hot Summer sun

 

heat index easily reaching 101

sun beating on ivory flesh

 

til it turns bright red

spanked by UV rays

 

til sweat trickles from head

Humidity so thick it surrounds

like fingers squeezing lungs

 

difficult to breath it's hold astounds

Suddenly leaves in trees start to

 

rhythmically sway back and forth

mother nature breathes deep sigh

 

of relief from the North

Clouds roll in like a blanket

 

covering up fiery solar rays

hot Summer day

 

turning into a scene of muggy haze

 

sit back and observe

 as the sky becomes so angry

smile as I realize

 

the fury will bring relief to me

Removing shoes

 

putting them right back on

 

flames of Hell lick at my feet

watching this Summer scene play out

 

settling back comfortably

 

in green wicker seat

bolt of lightning flashes

 

in front of my eyes

breeze getting stronger

 

as groans and sighs

 

come from the skies

Anger increasing

 

as the sky begins to roar

neighbors exit car

 

run for shelter to front door

Tears fall from stormy black clouds

Hitting roof

 

pit-pat-pitter-pat

 

so loud

fingers of humidity

 

begin releasing hold

stepping out from under eaves

 

feeling Mother Nature's tears

 

so cold

face upright

 

feeling her tears on skin

Regressing from

 

adulthood to childhood

 

spreading arms wide

 

beginning to spin

raindrops beat down

 

on pavement and steam

 

begins to rise

revelling in the BEAUTY

 

of the storm's groans and sighs

Dancing with raindrops

 

like a rendition of "Stomp"

lifting feet in puddles

 

beginning to romp

lovely anger and fury

 

storm in the Summer season

feeling innocent joy

 

and freedom of a child...

  and a few raindrops are the reason

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I chose option 3 for barbedwirebutterfly
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  • Florida Sunshine
    May 27, 2007
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    Oh I LOVED the way you wrote this~ I LOVED IT!!!! What a terrific job!


  • McFairy
    March 18, 2007

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    Heehee

    This is actually a very sweet write in a very intense kind of form, it reminds me of January in Joburg, it gets ridiculously hot but you can be rest assured round about 4 o clock in the afternoon, it will pour down but only for 10 minutes, it's odd.

    Thanks for entering

    ***Strangeangel***


  • McFairy
    March 18, 2007
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    ???

    Well this definitely isn't option 3 in my competition, please rectify.

    ***Strangeangel***


  • BarbedWireButterfly
    February 24, 2007

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    You must put the author option or I will DQ u. I'm sorry to b so harsh but after my last contest I'm fed up with ppl not doin it, so if you do it would be greatly appreciated. this poem definetly shows the rain in it but I want you to put the option so it's fair for everyone else. good luck and thnx for enterin


  • Whyitt U
    February 11, 2007

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    What a lovely poetic write. A few rain drops are the reason..oh to be there again. Well done!! Thanks for sharing. You forgot to put your favorite song and singer, one of the rules no harm Good luck!

    Whyitt U xxx


  • Vernal Bloom
    February 10, 2007

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    I love summers. You know it is the most favorite season for Iranian students since we are off for three days. My parents are also on vacation, my siblings come back to my town and we can be together for almost a long time! You took me to those days, dear.
    I realize there is a thoughtful paradox in your title “Summer Storms” interesting enough to involve readers. Just one note, changing your size from time to time was a bit distracting while I was reading your poem.
    Thank you for sharing your poem with us and good luck in the contest :-)

    ~Massy~


  • My Darkness
    February 10, 2007

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    whoa.. this was a long one.. the big text kind of threw me off at times, i thought this piece was good though.. i'm not a fan of heat, or hot summer days.. i'd much rather have the cold myself! hehe.. good luck to you!


  • Cannonsfire
    February 9, 2007

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    Dear sister,
    The tears of Mother Nature you paint vividly on the screen and it reminds of the heat I endure here in 'Oz', your voice again is strong and full of imagery, I liked this one


  • Iohagh
    February 9, 2007

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    This does it though...

    Darling hotpants

    One tragedy transposes another
    the world's warming up
    frigidity replacing heat's smother
    now all weather interrupts.

    Smoosh

    Janet


  • BeautifullyxTragic
    February 9, 2007

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    Amazing!

    This is fabulous! It's so descriptive. "feeling Mother Nature's tears"...such a unique concept! Love this! I especially like the mental picture you give of you dancing in the rain. O, how i love the rain!


  • February 9, 2007
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    great poem change the black ground

    maybe you need to change the colour of the back ground as black is more a sad colour

    • Sacrificial Love
      February 9, 2007
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      Sherry:

      I wanted the background/font to match the picture... black is not always an unhappy color... it's beautiful... especially when illuminated by lightning...

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