Dear Jesus,
Please look after my parents.
I'm asking for nothing more
But please bring them back to me.
They have been taken away
By those men
That came here one day.
And still I don't know why.
Dear Jesus,
I'm praying to You
Because I believe You are the only one
Who can help me.
Stalin says we must not believe in You
Because You don't exist.
But I think he's wrong...
Isn't he?
Dear Jesus,
Please tell Mummy I'm alright,
And tell Daddy to be strong
And comfort Mummy.
Make Stalin see that he's wrong,
Show him that he should not do all this to his people.
But above all,
Please bring Mummy and Daddy back home.
Dear Jesus,
I am going to bed now...
All alone...
I miss Mummy and Daddy so much.
I can't sleep when they're not here,
I am so scared.
I hope that that those men are not coming back...
Jesus... They are coming... Oh please help me!
Author notes
Another poem dealing with Stalin's Reign of Terror...
A contest entry
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Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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Deep in emotion through sadness and grief. Begging to Jesus to bring your parents back, oh what sad yet creative composition.... I wish you all the best
~Emily~ xx
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Going by your author notes it seemed to be more than "Stalin's reign of terror" but also about how when people pray to god, or Jesus, or what not, their prayers 9/10 times do not come true.
Either way: a nice social piece that you have written here.
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Stalin was a complete and utter Bastard/turd who had no care for anyone and everything for power. I do hope that he burns in eternal hellfire for all that he had done whilst alive.
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dein dichter ist schöne
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Danke!
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Sehr gut!
The German threw me off at first....i speak some but not that much!!
This was really depressing, and I loved it.
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Hey du
das war richtig bitter-süß und traurig *schnief* Großartiges Gedicht/gebet. mir isses heute leider zu warm, um ausführlicher zu kommentieren aber die 3 applause sagen ja alles oder?
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thanks for actually following the concept of the contest. and this is such a sad but truthful piece.
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Amazing
Very pleased with this the emotion that you expressed is amazing......
You took it beyond saying Dear Lord but you made it into a story...
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A well thought piece, ending on a very questionable note of faith. Thank you for your entry!
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Bravo
Im at a loss for words. This poem has so much sadness in the words. i feelyour pain without going through the experience. its just so powerful. somebody give me a shoulder to cry on.
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I am hold my prayers as well. This is wonderful. I think you have poured your heart out into this one. God bless you in all that you do.
Love you,
IN Christ Jesus,
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Thank you for subjecting yourself to my review. I think this is the third or fourth poem of yours that I have read with this theme. Although it is a good poem. It doesn't seem to have the power that some of the others did. I don't even know who i am responding to because this is a blind contest, but i can tell from your writing style that you have just entered my other contest and those were very powerful poems. This one just isn't quite up to the caliber of those two. It is still a very well written poem however.
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this pome is sooo sad. when you read it you can hear the little childs voice saying all these things. this poem is also sweet in the way that a little child could put so much fait in god.
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This is so sad but so good. You have written in volumes with this one. I think you have done it well. God bless you my child and keep writing for the Lord.
Tabitha Robin -
well done and very poignant.
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Stalin butchered an estimated 63 million of his fellow countrymen. Jesus saved a multitude of souls from celestial death. More clear and dramatically distinguished opposites can hardly be found. The moving words in your poem reflect the infinite Love of our saviour. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
U
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Religion,,,,nah....
I'm sorry I'm not a religious person...maybe something I should have mentioned...but this was a pretty good poem. I kind of liked the whole set-up of the whole thing, and it was well written. Thanks for entering!
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an incredible poem ...
it took my breath from the beginning to the end ...
I am still breathless ...
and so touched ...
thank you,
maa
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I really appreciate this work. I hope you continue writing because I would love to see what else you have to offer. You paint a rich picture with this pallet of words taking us along enveloping us in the feeling and emotion that pores from each line. very captivating in your choice of words. I liked the overall theme of this poem.
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This is simply stunning. Innocent faith within the clutches of the worst that man can be.
Your have portrayed the period well, yet sadly it can be placed over many periods in time. Including the present. Marvelous write.
Let us all be the peace we wish to see in this world.
Namaste!
Marianne
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WOW, This is a very powerful write you penned here Ann, you had me glued from start to finish, very emotional brought tears to my eyes it's so sad, well done dear poet good luck in the contest, sounds golden to me
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Aww You made me sad..which was the point! I loved Your poem it was great! I loved the emotion you put into it! Great Job and Good luck in the contest!
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That´s so sad (and true). Very well written. Wie ich ja schon einmal gesagt habe, finde ich es sehr wichtig, dass auch solche Gedichte geschrieben werden!
Well done.
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ich bin so gerührt Anne! Ich hätte fast geweint! Sehr emotionel! Stalin : klasse Idee geschichte nicht !!! Alle Achtung!!! Das erinnert mich an so viele Sachen!!! erst klassig, so viel gefühl habe ich noch nie bei dir gesehen!!!
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Excellent
A beautiful piece, I liked the era that you drew from. i am sure that there were many children during Stalin's reigh that prayed to Jesus, even though it went against the governments dictate. Lovely piece, great write sweetie
Bunny
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... and another masterpiece from you, sis. Wunderbar einfühlsam und wieder mal musste ich fast heulen. Wie du das schaffst, weiß ich nicht, aber du schaffst es immer wieder!
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Oh my Annie. This is an amazing write! I felt such emotion throughout this piece and then I started to feel anger for that small child being alone. Your wording and imagery are just wonderful to evoke such emotion in a reader.
Well done to you
Auntie xxx
Gaylenes
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Such a sad and emotion packed poem. Stalins terror it made me sad to think of all the children left behind. such a vivid picture you have painted.
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awwwww cuz this is the best Historical poem from the time period of Stalins terror it maked me cry to fink of all the lil kids left ahind when he took them parents away its like you bringed to life the forgotton terrors very very very well done cuz i so proud of this write your big cuz ~cheeky~
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This is very sad but well written! I think you have truly summed up what a child would pray. Fantastisch! Keep writing! Meggh xxxxxxxxxxxx
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