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Camel Caravan Crawls Calmly Cross Cooking Cauldron Countryside

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Above dry desert angry morn's red rise
expands sharp breathless air.  Sun sweeps starred skies,
grilling golden sands that sting rimmed eyes
of tanned, fanned, turbanned, swarthy touareg tribes
prostrate praying prophet. Bearded cries.
Dawn wakes dust swarm of jester-pester flies
round crawling camel caravan which plies
an ancient trade in spices, slaves, spies, scribes.


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  • crivanea
    August 5

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    wow...now that is some skill...impressive!!...love this..love how u can use technique look so effortless..nice imagery..and the pic. just enhance the magic of this piece..lovely write!

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  • Swan song gold member
    April 8
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    Excellent entry well done nice ryme and cadence

  • aslanlight
    April 2

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    Yoowwssaa this is so atmospheric, you take me there! I'm sweltering. I forget what the use of words with the same letter's called but your use of it here's excellent. I'm impressed.

    Peace Georgia

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  • SweetRoses
    April 2

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    Wow!!! I am completely blown away by this. This is one of the most creative and unique poems I've ever read. I take my hat off to you. Nicely done.

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  • Gertyore
    April 2

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    good

    I like it. You play with the words in a wonderful way. I've read it a couple times and will read it again.

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  • raggyann
    August 12, 2007
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    this is different a so veryu well done

  • pithyaplomb
    June 24, 2007

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    this is as cleverly creatived a si believe i have ever read and loved to have read again! Great composing and awsomed imagery really makes this a very distintive write for you in comparison of all others i would have to honostly say to you!

  • WolfDragons
    June 23, 2007

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    Nice alliteration and imagery . My favorite part is about the camel train because it reminds me of a song I made up once. It was a really long time ago.

  • My Darkness
    February 10, 2007

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    interesting indeed! alliteration, wow, haven't read any of that since high school... i think you did a pretty good job.. good luck to you!
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