I trace these steps,
Over and over,
Lingering in the shadow,
You left behind.
You left me behind,
With no one to comfort me,
No one to hold me,
No one to love me.
The aching of my heart,
Always eased when you were near,
But now you’re gone,
And the aching has worsened.
I cried for you to stay,
I screamed out your name,
But my words,
They went right through you.
I had made you a promise,
To make everyday worth it,
But that promise faded away,
When you left me alone.
Author notes
Lmfao yea... I got the idea for this poem from the show 'Naruto' lol wow I'm lame 
It's about Sakura's thoughts on when Sasuke left and what not lol yea I know... I'm a loser lmao
A contest entry
- Anime/Manga Fans Welcome! by Angel Lunarious.
390 points, ended February 23, 2007, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The One Day Naruto Poetry Contest! by Sle3p.
354 points, ended February 24, 2007, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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so i've never really been into anime, but from what I can see the girl did everything to make this relationship last where the guy kinda sat around and did nothing and ended up leaving her.. Beautiful write, I am sure you captured the real feeling this girl had.
Rose
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good job again i really like this one i can feel the emotion
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There is a typo in your author notes (i.e.: a;ways).
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that was awesome. i really liked this alot. i cannot tell how ell it goes cuz i havet seen those episodes yet but i'm getting there, naruto is the BEST anime every. lol great write
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hey..i was kinda amazed when i clicked the first poem of the contest and to find another naruto fan..
well i like ur write and it goes well with the situation..wish you all the best my friend
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You really are feeling a little heart broken at the moment aren't you? Despite the sadness of this piece, Its a really beautifully written piece of literature.
it's ok though, for as long as we are sharing our lives on the internet I'll luvv ya!
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Excellent
This is quite beautiful
Wonderfull crafting of words
Love the passion
Nice ending
I cried for you to stay,
I screamed out your name,
But my words,
They went right through you.
I had made you a promise,
To make everyday fun,
But that promise faded away,
When you left me alone.
Rick
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geez i forgot to comment on this one too...okok awesum poem!!! Nicole u kno I love your poems...and stories...but yea my comment is becoming longer and longer and it seems to have nothing really to do with this poem...even tho i love it...that might be cuz im really talkitive right now...k i'll go now...BYE!!!
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Great
i loved your poem,mostly becauce it was sad and i love sad poems for some odd reason. -
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thanks
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lol. I really like how you write, but I can't quite put my finger on exactly what it is that pulls me towards your poems. I think it's how you word your poetry. Very nice. Good luck in the contest.
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Wow i don't know that much about anime, but this poem is amazing!!!
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this is a very nice poem about the feelings that Sakura has for Sasuke. It isn't a manga/anime that I've looked at but I still got a nice feel for the character.
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thanks a bunch ^-^
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hey this was awesome I always did think it was sad that she cared about him so much and yet he left her this poem makes me think of my big sister as well when she up and left two years ago but she's back now and everythings great anyways I loved this I love Naruto too lol
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thanks ^-^
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wow if you had not added your author note I woudl have thougth it was about something that had happend in your life that was real. I really enjoyed reading it!
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thanks
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