Let us fall into a bed of roses
Where we can feel the softness of the petals brush against the feelings of excitement
Let us run away from the realities
Where walls that we create are destroyed by the drumming of our beating hearts
Let us escape into a place where only the two of us exist
Where love overcomes all obstacles
Let us be alone together
Gone from the worlds constant force that pushes our lives into an abyss of sadness
Let us fly away at the break of dawn
Migrating towards a warmer world where the coldness doesn’t capture our emotions
Let us cry in tune with a song
A song that takes us on a journey far from the place where we are all but actors
Let us lay together
Skin to skin; the warmth running down our spins making us feel like forever is never temporary
Let us live for the moment
Even if we know that tough times lay ahead of us
Let us express our real emotions without caring what others think
With real tears, smiles, laughs, and cries
Let us break the metal bars that keep us locked inside
Walk away from the critical people with our heads held up high
Let us dance in the light of the moon
Reach out and touch the miracles that we can create
Let us look into each others eyes
And realize what we have and what we can have if only we can let ourselves be who we are
Let us go back to that place
Where we steal a kiss under a rainbow of dreams
Where our solitude meets a lover’s wish
Where our nightmares vanish into the crisp night air
Where the beauty of our souls entwine upon our hearts
Let us go to the place we have already created
And let it grow even more into a never-ending field of roses
Where we lay together
Petals falling down like pearls of rain upon our skin
Letting love overcome all other obstacles
Author notes
Okay this is my first time writting a love poem like this, i want to give it to a special someone, please let me know what you think If i should change a few words or just not give the poem at all, or if i should change nothing at all. please be honest. PLEASE
A contest entry
- Collaborations of Love For Valentines by Poetry and I Inc.
600 points, ended February 14, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - rite me a poem for the one u luv by a means to an end.
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PROVE YOU'RE WORTHY OF MY POINTS by EmeraldDaze.
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - True Love by rahdeath.
550 points, ended June 24, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Hood-Winked!
Such wonderful emotions and love for this special person. Excellent imagery. Such a wonderful expression of love.
Keep up the wonderful writing
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Hood-Winked!
A beautiful heartfelt write. Lovely imagery. Good flow and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Vivid descriptives. Nice simile. You pour out your feelings of love and expectations very well in this piece. A much enjoyed read.
You have just been hood-winked by a member of The Poetic Bandits.
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I can feel the love throughout the poem, but there are a couple misspellings: line 8 worlds should be world's, and line 14 spins should be spines. I also think that several of your lines are too long. But these things can be easily fixed. I think this is a very sweet love poem. Thank you for entering my contest.
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oh my god...
this poem is so amazing, i have tears in my eyes it's so true and real, and it is clear how much emotion has been poured into it... i love it, it's probably my favourite poem of all-time!!
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Awesome!
My favorite line is probably "Petals falling down like pearls of rain upon our skin." On your main page you said you weren't a great writer. Well, I beg to differ! This is a great poem and it really spoke to me. If it is your first love poem, then you really have potential to write even more great ones like this! Kudos!
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wow... this is a great poem. i really liked the third stanza i think it was, it was my favorite part. great write1
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Hmmm, I'd love 2 allow u for this contest; however I'm requiring entries that are "collaborations" and this doesn't fit. Also, u have 2 put collaborator's name in Author's Notes. If u go back and make changes on this one, I'll reconsider u. -theQueen"
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