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Bright Eyes Gleam

 

 

 

My days are spent in trances
while all my nightly dreams
no light know where your glances
are absent, their fair gleams
dispel sad circumstances
as sharing's warming streams
link heart to heart. The chance is
enchanting as Life's schemes
respond to Love's advances
in harmony which beams
from both as spark advances
from Earth to Air like steam
ascending as romance is -
like strawberries and cream
or never ending dances
dreams populate as teems
imagination, - stance is
as mirrored damascene, -
sublime state which perchance is
of all life’s joys supreme
that happiness enhances
when eyes cue bright eyes' gleam …

Author notes

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damascene : (of metals especially steel) decorated or inlaid with a wavy pattern of different precious metals especially silver or gold

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Comments

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  • Shannanagan
    July 3
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    very pretty and nice write thanks for entering
  • Xqzt
    June 26

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    Smooth as...!

    The flow is of a winding murmuring rill in the quiet, dense rainforest. Sudden flashes of sunlight sparkle in velvet malachite light, reflecting the appreciative gleam in my eye.

    Thankyou for your intelligent use of the image. Love the partnership.

    . Rewarded 4


  • Chibi Novelist
    June 21
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    This is a truly beautiful write. Thank you and good luc

  • Nature Song silver member
    June 5

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    The soft flow and beat to this poem is almost like a heartbeat. Fine penning. Good luck in this contest ~Sie


  • meic
    May 19
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    Enjoyable

    There are some nice passages in this piece which flows smoothly in a steady rhythm.

  • ladame
    May 19

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    Exciting, hazey and beautiful. I like the rhythm, and the rhyme is quite perfect - flowing well and un-hindering.

  • Still Hers
    April 30

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    Wow I love the Rythem and ryhmeing you have going on in this poem. It has great imagery words in it to I love. Good luck in the contest

    . Rewarded 4


  • brightredtulips
    October 23, 2007

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    This is nicely done. I love it. Unfortunately at the moment I can't think of a thing to say. hmmm.
    it is wonderful and heartfelt and very meaningful.
    i hope i can think of more to say.
    well the only other thing i can think of is that the first two lines are my favorite, i really enjoyed reading this.


    Thank you for entering and best luck in the contest.
    ~bird

  • Flutterby--x
    October 21, 2007
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    Nice authors notes

    Thank you for entering, this is wonderful

  • lexie like woah
    September 10, 2007

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    hehe my penguin does give great hugs.. this is a great write. it is sweet, very sweet indeed. nice rhyme and meter, didnt notice any typos, brownie points there. thanks for entering and good luck


  • Blankscreen2222 gold member
    September 9, 2007

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    Oh, this is lovely.
    It reads like a dream.
    Enjoyed very much.
    Thankyou.

    Best of luck in the contest.


  • xCandieKissesx
    September 8, 2007

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    I love the flow and beat. The passion was great! I like how you used the vocabulary wisely. Great job! Good luck in the contest!
    Jackie ♥

  • just-a-lonely-girl
    August 25, 2007

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    great poem, I love the flow of it, and I like how the lines rhymed throughout the entire poem. very nice job.
    thanks for entering!

    ~kit~

  • Xxthe angry gothxX
    July 12, 2007
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    This flows very nicely. I never saw a poem written like this before. I thought it was pretty cool. One of my favorite lines from this was:"Bright gleams
    brush adverse circumstances
    away as warming streams
    link heart to heart."

    It had great imagry. Keep it up and don't stop writing!


  • ms-cuddles
    July 11, 2007

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    Lovely Write

    I enjoyed reading this. If only every glance could shoot such sparks. The only thing left to do is approach and say hi and see if it's really love at first sight for two. Thanks for entering and good luck. Hugs~ Cuddles

  • QuackQuackTiffany
    July 11, 2007

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    This is a great poem. The flow went on perfectly. You're an awesome writer! Thank you for the entry! =]

  • Golden Jaguar
    July 2, 2007

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    Very Beautiful!

    This poem is really beautiful and it flows in a wonderful way.

    "..Bright gleams
    brush adverse circumstances
    away as warming streams
    link heart to heart.."

    - very interesting part, in my opinion, "as warming streams link heart to heart" - what a pure vision! This is a great line, that carries your imagination and that fantasy of the words combination.

    Interesting and eyes catching title!

    Great poem and i enjoyed reading it!

    ~G.J~

    . Rewarded 8


  • XyMaya
    July 2, 2007

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    WOW!!
    I REALLY like this!!
    You captured a dance that a person can feel when you fall head-over-heels for that ONE preson!!

    I loved this poem!
    It was absolutly amazing!!!

    Great write!

    . Rewarded 4


  • PhoenixFaith
    July 1, 2007

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    Wonderful write you have here it flows very well and it was very fun to read. I had to read it again cause I liked it so much and I wanted to see if I missed anything that you wanted expressed. Great job keep it up.

    Never give up
    Kate

  • Water Color Sky
    June 30, 2007

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    This poem is filled with great imagery and words. I don't think you could have written this poem any better. The flow of it is pretty good, but the emotion is what makes it great. Thanks so much for sharing!
    -Ashley

  • Wild Horses
    June 29, 2007
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    Bright Eyes Gleam

    I liked the word choice and imagery of the poem, but I have to admit "while all my nightly dreams
    no light know where soft glances
    encourage not." I didn't understand at all. It might have just been spelling/grammatical error or I simply don't understand, but I couldn't really get that part. Overall though it was beautifully crafted.

  • Beautiful Mistake
    June 24, 2007
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    It had a very nice even flow and was beautifully done. Good job.

  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    June 22, 2007

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    sublime state which perchance is
    of all life’s joys supreme
    that happiness enhances
    when eyes to bright eyes gleam …

    Well my friend your words are showing the depth and the heart which is beyond to comprehend even in the words sometimes...beautiful penning and miracululous immaggery is here...Your flow of the sentiment is the only factor to understand this beauty of life ..The crescendo of the images here are truly wonderful and touching..Very impressive work is here...
    a great work ...




  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 20, 2007

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    Very sweet

    Oh the visual electricity between ones in love for they truly glow and the sparkle within their eyes say life is so good

    . Rewarded 4


  • soulfultia gold member
    June 19, 2007

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    This had a nice smooth flow and for me it was a wonderful read, certainly my pleasure to read this evening, keep up the good work! ~Tia

    . Rewarded 4

  • Topaz
    February 9, 2007
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    Bright eye to eye,
    enters heart to heart,
    know life's reflective love,
    in dream states glow.... Very dreamy poem of love. Love the simile "like strawberries and cream or never ending dances dreams populate as teems imagination,". Wonderful poem. Wishing you all the best in the contest.

    Lula

    . Rewarded 4


  • Night Hope gold member
    February 9, 2007

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    "Bright gleams
    brush adverse circumstances
    away as warming streams
    link heart to heart."

    Sighhh...Ohhh, my...This is quite lovely, dear Scribe...Such sensual undertones, musical language & gentle metaphors employed herein...A gorgeous piece, my Friend...A wondrous reading for my sleep~filled eyes to behold...Good luck in the contest... Wanda

    . Rewarded 4

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