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With Just 48 Hours Left...

I'd party it up just one more time
Get wasted with all of my friends
So they'd all have a night to look back on
Make some final memories to laugh about
And thank them for all the good times.
I'd cuddle with my daughter every spare moment
Maybe write her a letter so she'd never forget
That Mommy loved her more than life itself
I'd play with my nephew till we both passed out
I'd let my mother read my writing...in the book that I made
I know she's proud of me for it, which is all I ever wanted
I'd probably let out every secret I've hidden inside
I'd make amends with those I have hurt
And rid myself of any guilt that still remained.
I couldn't face goodbyes, there'd never be enough time
So a video diary would just have to do
And with my one last dying breath I'd tell him how I really felt
So that if he didn't feel the same I wouldn't feel the pain
And if he did...well I wouldn't have to live with the regret...
The knowing that I could have had him all along and hid instead.

Author notes

Ok...well I'm not sure if this is at all what you wanted. I thought it was an awesome contest idea, and i sat down and started writing and realized...there's nothing huge that I'd do with my life in the last 48 hours. I'd make the most of the little moments. They are what mean the most to me...just be me nothing huge. I hope it isn't awful...I never do poetry without rhyming...

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  • torturedsoul9876
    May 7, 2007
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    Good

    I Enjoyed reading this poem a lot its very good. and thanks for the correction.


  • Desiree-Valdez
    May 6, 2007

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    That sums it up really good!! I have no idea what I would do if I had only 48 hours left, I would want to rid myself of guilt but also fear that others would hate or remember me badly, then again maybe not its kinda hard to hate someone for thier mistakes when you know they are dying. Good job


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    February 9, 2007
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    "I couldn't face goodbyes, there'd never be enough time"
    I feel like a proud mother. There truly is never enough time for goodbyes, thank you so much for entering, and no this IS NOT awful. Flow was great, and the rhyming fitted well.

    Jailah.