She sweeps in like a vamp.
Hitches a ride on a breeze.
Controls elements with ease,
Sun’s her ultra-violet lamp.
Wind is at her beckon call,
fancies using it to tease.
Uprooting lives and trees,
her power used to enthrall.
Rain falls at her command,
Wet drops permeate earth.
Prepares for seedlings birth,
nature’s essence in her hand.
Spring is a woman in control,
nurtures each flower’s bloom.
Like woman, you can't assume,
Does whatever suits her soul.
Author notes
Quatrain abba rhyme scheme
A contest entry
- The Poets Write by Starrchild777.
975 points, ended March 8, 2007, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This poem is beautiful. I love the calmness of it yet the title makes you think it will be different. An elegant choice of words and all in all a very beautiful and inspiring poem.
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Thank you Dwellingin Dakness
So appreciate your kind comments and applause, so glad you enjoyed, I will repay the review tomorrow, tired, tired, tired. Thanks!
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a difficult form factor here
was no problem for this talented writer.. and the content suffers not at all...nature as a woman in charge..makes sense to me... very nicely done
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Thank you Peteskid
So appreciate you taking the time to comment and review, thank you for the applause as well, so glad you enjoyed the write. I will pay back your review tomorrow, I am way too tired to read anymore. Thank you
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1st> Thank you for your entry in our contest. Glad we were on the spot to help you get this in.
2nd> Do you wish to keep your past & present tense as written? Do you want to keep it virtually puncuationless?
3rd> At this time I'm only verifying what's printed and showing so when I come back next week to review, I know how to read it. Presentaion changes not only the surface story but more importantly, either adds or detracts from any underwrites. -
This is not a poem to think, but to enjoy in its beauty. I realy can smell a springtime on your site.
~Sonja~
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Thank you Sonja
One more poem and I have written 400 poems! Next book will be bigger! Thank you for your kind comments, told you I am on a spring kick, thank you for always being here, love your reviews.
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