I'll call you my sugar
For you are so sweet
I'll eat you up
My special treat
I thought you were simple
You were a big suprise
I hope you're my sugar sweety
But I now feel compromised
I should'nt of brought you home
They all said you were sick
They said you looked slimy and sticky
But I smiled and said 'Just one lick'
Author notes
I kind of feel disappointed after writing that. I was really confident in the beginning, and the beginning sounds good to me, but the rest just doesn't seem to flow as good as I wished. But I hope some of you enjoyed it!
A contest entry
- Kiss me and make me your prince by El Pescador.
1800 points, ended February 17, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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PERFECT!
DONT YOU CHANGE A THING ON THIS!!
I'll call you my sugar
For you are so sweet
I'll eat you up
My special treat
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i dont even know.
i liked it
but i dont know what to say.
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