If I asked you very kindly
If I asked you pretty please
If I climbed a thousand mountains
If I braved the raging seas
Would you think of me as worthy
Better than all other men
If I crossed a million rivers
Darling would you love me then?
I’ve waited oh so long, it seems
to hear these questions posed.
Now I’ll try to answer
and leave my heart exposed.
Don’t climb a thousand mountains
Don’t jump into the sea
Darling,please do nothing
but give your heart to me.
Put your heart here near mine
we’ll make memories of our own.
Erasing the old shadows
of other loves we’ve known.
We can swim the seas together
or cross the farthest plane
Now I’ve tried to answer
will you ask again?
I will ask you very kindly,
I will ask you pretty please.
I will get down at your feet
and beg upon these knees.
I will ask a thousand times
but please don't make me guess.
Darling, won't you answer me
let the answer please be yes.
Don't get down upon your knees
with tears my vision blurred.
You've just made a dream come true
oh how my heart is stirred.
Darling, you've but to do one thing
and already that's been done.
Long ago t'was in a dream
and you, my heart have won.
Author notes
Written with a-bear
A contest entry
- Collaborations of Love For Valentines by Poetry and I Inc.
600 points, ended February 14, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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we did do nice collabs didn't we ... Oh well. Parting is such sweet sorrow lmao
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wonderful
This is a marvelous Him to Her collaboration which is very reminiscent of to 'Her Reply'. I also have a poem that is quite similar in theme titled' 'Valentine's Day Presence' if you would like to read it. Please feel free to send me a seed of an idea, and then I will try to send you something back to work on. Also. congratulations on winning the silver trophy- you two surely deserved it and more.
All the best,
David Michaels
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much liked
awesome...
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Wow what a beautiful piece so full of amazing questions and anwsers. It flows so well, you did a very nice job.
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Beautiful
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What a beautiful collaboration! The flow is so smooth and graceful across the page and the imagery behind the words is just awesome. I can picture these two lovers so perfectly within my mind. You two have done a marvelous job here. I love it! I am not surprised you won a trophy for this. It was well deserving for sure.
♥ Touchof1der
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Beautiful! Lovely, lovely questions and answers... you both did a beautiful job; great emotions conveyed. Best of luck to you in the contest!
(Ps, here's a tip: indent either yours or a-bear's... kinda of helps with the transition between characters)
Lovely work!
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that's a great idea. thanks.
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i like it...
good poem... kinda confusing though... are you answering yourself? or is it the other person answering...??? pretty good overall though... but still i like it
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rakerman1 and I wrote this together...it's supposed to be a he asks the questions and she answers...I don't know how to make it more obvious unless we put he says, she says...then it's kind of ruined. Thanks for the reading and comment though.
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Aww that was really sweet!
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This is great!
I like this very much. It touches those sentimental parts...LOL Take it easy and keep up the good work!
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Easy flow, perfect rythym, and the rhyme is anything but forced. The obvious sincerity really takes this piece from a cute little valentine's card to a heartfelt love poem. And I agree with painting-a-soul, this would make a fantastic song. Again, very nice write, and thanks for sharing!
God bless, Rose
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Bravo!!
This is extemely romantic.
A beautiful tribute to ones love.
It had a fresh feel of youth and innocents.
I could sense the sincerity in your words.
I love the images of the colorful hearts.
Who ever she is she should be very proud.
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Awww this is a wonderful collaboration, it's so sweet and your writing styles compliment each other. Actually until I got to the end I didn't notice that two different people were writing it, rather than one person answering for both. Fantastic job!
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Awww. I love this peice!!! Both of your writting styles complements the other so nicely! This is such a sweet loving peice! Thanks so much for sahring and I hope you guys do great in the contest!
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this is very well done
not too flowery some repitition of heart for good effect..has a sincerity that is appealing.. don't perform feats just be with me..good theme
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beautiful beginning and ending. lovely rhymes scheme. just all in all a good poem. <33
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Very well done.
Nicely written. A fine love poem with a good rhyme scheme. I smiled as I read it, because it brought back some fond memories. Thanks for sharing this one.
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Omg
I honestly don't think a girl could resist this..
It would be heart melting and quenching..
The opening stanza is just superb!
"If I asked you very kindly
If I asked you pretty please
If I climbed a thousand mountains
If I braved the raging seas
Would you think of me as worthy
Better than all other men
If I crossed a million rivers
Darling would you love me then?"
it's just so rhyming and elagent..
you can just hear it as a bard.
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would she be able to resist!
thats so deep! too much love, to much sense!! too beautiful ..
"Never mind, forget my speech.
for a moment vision blurred.
Talking of mere dreams again
hearts break without a word.
Leave me just one memory
My love, before you go.
Will you kiss me deeply
I already love you so."
thats awesome!! loved ur work..
me
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Great job i loved it , and wish you
the best of luck in the contest.
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this is beautiful!! i love it love it love it!!! amazing write, and i think it would make a wonderful song as well!!
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Wow. I love this write...everything about it is absolutely beautiful. The flow is perfect...wow.
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Alyssa says this would make a good song..a duet. Do you have a good voice? LOL
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How delightful!!!!!
Impressive read here. Loved the flow and rhyme scheme. Subtle and not 2 far over the top! Gr8 job and good luck in the contest!
-theQueen"
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