In the early hours my spirits renew
Life is a banquet, each day a new start
Overnight worries I chase from my heart
Visions and promises in my purview
Everything's possible, I am with you
Some days life seems just too good to be true
Under night's watch flowers glisten with dew
Night becomes day as the sky bursts with light
Rising from bed I am awed by the sight
In the early hours my spirits renew
Some day life seems just too good to be true
Everything's possible, I am with you.
Author notes
Each line is 10 syllables and there is a rhyme scheme.
A contest entry
- The Contest Which Must Not Be Named by Orual.
700 points, ended February 22, 2007, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Now you're scaring me. You created an puzzle with rhyme that actually makes sense. I loved your tag line and I'm sure your love will too. You didn't specially call this a Valentine's Day poem but the last two lines are so hopeful and happy that this is a true love poem.
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Wonderful Rhyming Acrostic!!!!!!!!!
P, You have done a brilliant piece in this rhyming acrostic for the sunrise. I like the idea that you only had 3 rhyme schemes in it. The rhythm and rhyme were fantastic. I have never seen this rhyme scheme of a bbaa aaccaaa. It worked perfectly for this. Kudos for you my friend, another golden piece from you like the bright sunshine as it makes its way up into the sky to start the day anew. Thank you for sharing the gift of your pen and best wishes in the contest. It does sound golden. Love and God bless, Joyce
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You weren't at all obligated to change it, but I do like this better. Especially the first two lines.
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The last line fit so well, like you planned it. I think I really like this form of poetry, it seems to work pretty well. This was very descriptive, for seeming so short. bravo
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Bene! You met all the requirement, first of all, so I am quite pleased with that alone. Your imagery and flow were excellent, as well. I found the A AAAA AAAAAAA rhyme scheme a little too repetative; I really just wanted rhyme to be present. Your approach was not bad, though. I enjoyed the poem on the whole.
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