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Hurt

It’s very dark inside here,

I cannot see the way.

But when you were near,

Your lack of doubt pushed the darkness away.

 

However, when you were down,

Struggling in your own fight,

You left me behind,

Without any source of light.

 

So many things I voiced aloud to you,

That never before hit air.

But how could I continue,

If you just weren’t there?

 

They say hate the sin, and love the sinner.

It is so true.

I truly hate suicide,

But I ended up blaming you.

 

I was wrong to be that hurtful,

But I couldn’t help what I felt.

Now I wish I could take it back,

Although it’s good to get it out.

 

So you think I am low and unworthy,

And I wish I could prove otherwise,

But I cannot think of a way,

That you will not care to despise.

 

I struggle to get back to my life,

But my drive is gone.

Tears stain my cheeks,

I don’t want to move on.

I am so sorry,

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  • The Existentialist
    April 23, 2007
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    this was good. very emotional. however, i feel like with more emotional poem its better to either not rhyme, or just let the rhyming come to you, whereas this seemed a bit forced. honestly, i think you do better when you dont rhyme, but this was still pretty good.
    stay positive
    the existentialist

  • Lovemusic4life
    April 10, 2007
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    Wow

    This is reallly good but its also saddd :[ but u wrote out ur feelings realy well


  • Bella Luna
    March 13, 2007
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    I like the way you mad it sound like a friend was leaving and becoming somthing else cause tht happens soo many times in life we just have to find our own light so it doesn't go totaly dark when someone follows their own path and leaves you stranded.

    ~Chel<33

    • WickdlyUndrstanding
      March 13, 2007
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      Thanks. That is what it was about.. my friend tried to commit sucide, leaving me behind, and i was very hurt.
      ~WU

  • b e a u t i f u l
    February 8, 2007

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    When I read this, it made me think of my friend Cassie. I wrote a poem about her and what she went through but I can understand trying to help someone and them not accepting it. It's hard to watch someone you care about change right before your eyes, to just be so helpless... Idk if that's what this means to you but that's some of what I got from it. Thanks for commenting my poem <3


  • Buried in Black
    February 8, 2007

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    I LOVE LOVE LOVE IT! i love how the format is of deep dark desire's. i love it, and when pulled of correctly, it is amazing. great work toys. cya tomorrow

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