One day I woke to see the sun so bright
Alight, the day has begun
A day of new toils and fun
A cockerel upon the hay doth crow
To show the start of the day
Which drives the darkness away
Awoken by the piercing cry i'th morn
Before the sun's in the sky
People start hastening by
Author notes
This is my first attempt at an englyn penfur. I don't think it went that well, but there.
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I don't know what an englyn penfur is but, this is a nice work and your words create an image that is very vivid and beautiful.
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striking
I'm not too sure what an englyn penfur is...but I'm going to guess that it is a Welsh form. It sounds Welsh. I like it. I love the picture your poem paints. It's very real and vivid. I like the old-fashioned language too. I'm not sure if thats a tradition of the form or just the way you wrote your poem but either way it makes the poem all the more striking.
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I'll will confess to you my total ignorance of an "englyn penfur". Your poem is very curious, it is well done, although the 4th line seems to be written in an English more common to the period right after Chaucer (d.1361) bravo!
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