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Quiet and Still

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It was snowing that day, she remembered the past,
the wind whistled through her, a cold, icy blast.

The clouds were leaden and loaded with snow,
she still came to see him, to just let him know.

Her love hadn’t dwindled despite many years,
no other she’d found, but he still caused her tears.

She thought of the others, trapped underground,
did they have to suffer; were they ever found?

The alarm had sounded, her heart filled with dread,
she rushed to the pit head, how many were dead?

Survivors were bought  to the top in a cage,
appalling conditions and barely a wage.

His body was buried deep in the pit,
never recovered, to Gods earth commit.

To honour his life a headstone was laid,
some compensation in money was paid.

“I miss you my Darling and I always will,
I’ll lay down beside you, so quiet and still”.

Winter closed in, snow thick and deep,
she lay by her husband her vigil she'll keep.

A few weeks later her body was found,
just as she lay there, asleep on the ground.

Every day of her life, though meaning, had none,
she went to be with him in death, now as one.
 
 
 
 
 

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I wrote this from the perspective of a couple who have been married a long time and she never came to terms with his death in the mines.

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 30, 2008

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    You are absolutely the master of these kind of writes Sue !! They always grab my heart and give it a big squeeze!!!!


  • Glasyalabolas
    September 24, 2007

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    Very strong and emotional tale, laid out well in ryhming scheme, which isn't always easy to do when telling such a story.

    Good write and congrats on bronze.


  • Sally the Ragdoll
    August 26, 2007

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    Wow, this poem is absolutely beautiful!
    Your rhyme scheme remains constant throughout, and I love the way that the poem tells a story.
    Keep up the excellent work, and good luck in the contest!

    -Sally


  • Ilma
    July 16, 2007

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    Gah at accidentally posting twice -.-''

  • Ilma
    July 16, 2007

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    Wow, I adored it, it was brilliant, so touching yet tragic at the same time, a truely brilliant write, best of luck and keep writing


  • th3sl4y3r
    May 24, 2007

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    this is so sad, so well written... for someone to love that much, that deeply that they can not possibly go on with out their love... you have portrayed those emotions so well and told a story in the process.. this certainly is heartbreaking... I love these lines...
    "Winter closed in,
    Snow thick and deep,
    She lay by her husband
    Her vigil did keep.

    A few weeks later
    Her body was found,
    Just as she lay there,
    Asleep on the ground.

    Every day of her life,
    Meaning, had none,
    She went to join him
    In death, as one."
    wonderfully written, well done!!
    thank you for entering my contest and good luck..
    peace and light always..


  • owlishhunter
    February 12, 2007
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    Very deep and full of sadness and love...another great write you have here, my friend!


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    February 8, 2007

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    Excellent

    Sue this is a brilliant poem, although a sad write it shows the depth and dedication of true love at its best. another great write from you my dearest friend love Brian.x


  • Spiritvision angel
    February 8, 2007

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    Oh, This is really sad and yet has a amazing sense of devotion between the ones written about. I felt a heavy heart of of sadness as I read this but, enjoyed it at the same time. Well done

  • Amanda 88
    February 8, 2007
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    lovely!!


  • Lovely Amaranth
    February 8, 2007
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    Awww, so sweet and loving and yet sad. I loved it.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    February 8, 2007

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    beautiful and dark

    Dark and deeply deeply emotional. Amazing how love can linger and last for so long. Even after the death of a loved one that has happened years ago. This was darkly beautiful in it's imagery and flow.

    And the ending was just heartbreaking. Very well done with this, my Darkmistress. This was very very good indeed.
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