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Nothing

Silence,
Gnaw fervent at your heart,
unspoken battle, fading friends,
pulsate through time and space,
Louder
Softer
Gone.
Nothing stings so ceaselessly
as nothing.

Nothing can feel so solid,
as when you cut through air with knives
af cruel sharp words,
that linger on your tongue, as they reverberate
in hurting ears, and nothing
fills the air once more.

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  • Moonlit-Reveries
    February 24, 2007

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    This was my favorite line: Nothing stings so ceaselessly
    as nothing.

    I pondered that for a bit and it's so true.
    Your ending was particularly effective too. I'm very familiar with that feeling and you captured it beautifully.

    Very nice entry and best of luck. Thanks for entering too!


  • workingharleylady
    February 21, 2007

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    sweet!

    very nice. short , sweet & to the point, my favorite kind. Really i loved this poem of yours. I 'll be checking out others of yours in the extreme near future. Peace, Chrissy/ workinghrlyldy


  • Providence
    February 19, 2007

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    Silence as never ending. It can be out most intimate pleasure AND our most ultimate pain.

    Very Nice write!
    Bravo!
    Marianne


  • Madcap
    February 10, 2007

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    Nothing stings so ceaselessly
    as nothing.

    That's a really great line, probably the best in the poem...which I liked by the way.


  • Myjoy gold member
    February 9, 2007

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    Wow this is really afective. I really like it and only hope that for others it opens up the mind to the hurt we place in others by our words.


  • Alice Anesthetized
    February 9, 2007

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    i think you misspelled of..
    I like the progression from Louder to softer to gone.
    You made silence feel like a parade, which I would think is a difficult thing to do.
    I like this line best
    ...that linger on your tongue, as they reverberate
    it added a whole different feel to the poem.
    Overall you achieved a very emotional write.


  • briareus gold member
    February 8, 2007

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    Philosophers have written about nothingness or 'néant' -- this lean and sharply focused poem shows the idea as reality, it's existential.


  • xoxhanniexox
    February 8, 2007
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    I like this.

    "Silence,
    Gnaw fervent at your heart,
    unspoken battle, fading friends,
    pulsate through time and space,
    Louder
    Softer
    Gone."

    That was my favorite part.. well done.

    Good luck in your contest!

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