He stood facing omnipotent evil,
considering the offer.
Wanting to feed his aspirations
of poetic splendor.
As if a matchstick struck
he nodded, soul binding to the pact.
Wishes granted, greed fed.
His words began to bloom,
petals seeping out of the pen
with ever sculpted paradox.
His metaphors shifted hearts, tearing ground
under the plumage of verse.
"Bravo" they chanted to his perfection.
However eloquent his portrayal
however sharp his thoughts
mirrors reflected his decay.
Gleaming eyes flared in the flames
as he traded life for immortal creation
A martyr for poetry.
Every word uttered danced
while his blood drained
from painting the deepest meanings,
crispest landscapes and sordid soliloquies.
His work so purely beautiful
echoed around the world
emotions created ~ lives changed
With such happiness, consequences
haunted. He knew it was time, trying
to round of the last line - panic -
as his body slowly froze.
The pact fulfilling, as his skin
locked to a marble statue.
Tears trapped by stone, vocabulary bound.
The stone poet - unable to share the spectrum in his mind.
A contest entry
- Just flow and let yourself go. by Blueskywonder.
1200 points, ended February 9, 2007, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Search for the best AP Poet by wolfcub.
600 points, ended March 1, 2007, 64 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I would like you to comment on what you like or dislike about the poem. But most of all - does it make sense to you? Be honest I love criticism :D
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I especially liked this:
"However eloquent his portrayal
however sharp his thoughts
mirrors reflected his decay.
Gleaming eyes flared in the flames
as he traded life for immortal creation
A martyr for poetry.
Every word uttered danced
while his blood drained
from painting the deepest meanings,
crispest landscapes and sordid soliloquies."
This brings to mind, the overworked, the underappreciated. I think a lot of people have been there. I know I have. Awesome job! Congratulations on your winnings.
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Extremly impressive!!
THIS DESERVES A GOLD!!
wow, im seachless, the word use and metaphor in this beautiful piece is just amazing,
you have an awesome talent!
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wowwwwwwww awsome poem ..congrats on the trophys it has well deserved ..cheeky
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Wow! This only received bronze? This is one of the best I've read in awhile. Great job...and congratulations on the bronze.
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'His words began to bloom,
petals seeping out of the pen
with ever sculpted paradox.'
I loved these lines, they really summed up the whole beauty of this piece. Very powerful, and it had that attraction that meant I just couldn't stop reading! Really reat expression.
Thankyou for entering and good luck in my contest.
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Thanks for the bronze wolf - glad you enjoyed my entrance and thank you for hosting this competition. Let the second round begin! (whenever it does!)
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WOW!!! To sell your soul to be a great poet...what a thought. An amazingly beautiful write. Well done. Keep them coming and blessed be.
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you have made quite the work of art. you did very well with making this character and what he wanted in life. then how in the end he became trapped and unable to share his dream (at least thats what i got out of it)
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This pulled me in from the first line its content is powerfully expressed so to is the theme which i realy enjoyed.Well done and thankyou for sharing.
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Thank you all for the positive feedback - I am glad you enjoyed it and didn't dismiss it as a muddle of long words (it really isn't tha I promise
) Thank you so much Baloo for the silver!
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dancing vibrant words echoing around the world creating emotions and changing lives....moved my mind also...
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Brilliant.
Wow I really liked this poem alot! It was beautiful yet defective. What a message it brings. Well said. The line "However sharp his thoughts mirrors reflected his decay" Powerful.
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This is a powerfully written piece which draws in the reader. Well Done!
I like it, I think the words were well chosen. It was amazing. Very good. This is deep. Truley amazing and beautiful. I can relate to this which may sound crazy but its the truth. This is touching considering the hard times in my life. A well written write. Very good imagery, flow and tone. Excellent word choice. Thought provoking. A well crafted piece.
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Wow, its like deep. Its about the devil and making a choice. I really like it. I like these lines
"His work so purely beautiful
echoed around the world
emotions created ~ lives changed
With such happiness, consequences
haunted. He knew it was time, trying
to round of the last line
when his body froze into a desert red marble.
Tears trapped by stone, vocabulary bound
The stone poet - unable to share the spectrum in his mind."
Very good work!
See? You have not lost your touch in writing, just think of what you want and go. Or just write and don't stop let the pen be your mind and let it flow across the empty page untill that page is filled.
Tela
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