Shadows closing in
I can feel it begin
Dying alone
No one hearing me moan
No family that cares
Your lover just stares
Dying alone
No one hearing me moan
My broken heart never mends
My bodies unbroken trends
Dying alone
No one hearing me moan
Who writes my last words
Not even heard by the birds
Dying alone
No one hearing me moan
I begin to wonder how
I could be alone now
Dying alone
No one hearing me moan
In a crowded room
It was such a loud boom
Dying alone
No one hearing me moan
God it's so cold
Why was I so bold
Dying alone
No one hearing me moan
I should've been there
But I didn't care
Dying alone
No one hearing me moan
Bleeding from my eyes
Staring into the black skies
Dying alone
No one hearing me moan
A tunnel
Or maybe a funnel
Dying alone
No one hearing me moan
Walking into the light
And greeted by the sight
Dying alone
No one hearing me moan
You know what I see?
Hell spread before me
Dying alone
No one hearing me moan
A sudden shocking pain
Stabbing in my brain
Dying alone
No one hearing me moan
I feel suddenly free
And look down at a dead me
He died alone
Not a single person, cared about the last moan
Author notes
I've always been afraid of dying alone
A contest entry
- Oka's Dark Contest! #2 by okadadokie.
450 points, ended February 15, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 5 options for the creative poet (10) by bananasfoster42.
525 points, ended March 15, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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yeah this is also what i think would happen if i killed myself. think no one would really care if i was gone, but there are days that i can cope a little better, then other days, so i keep fighting and i hope u do to. this is great keep writing.
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great write. thanks for entering!
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im here so you will never die alone i love you brother i hope you find someone that makes you truly happy so you are never truly alone i know things seem hard right now but you will be ok i promise *hugs*
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this is well written.. again. i love the repeted phrase.
you sure do have talent.
xx
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Very very dark. I love how you kept the one phrase going. And it was so unreal how the feelings in the poem touched me. Great job. Good luck.
~Oka
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