You said you were not mine
But still agreed there's a silver line
You said 't was a mistake
But still my ambience you take.
You said, cant love me any more
But still hand in hand we trespassed the shore.
Besides another on this bed we slept
Walking down the lane those feelings we left
My soul lay naked
In awe of ecstacy
I still remember that mid-day bloom
That every touch, was a fantasy.
Spring went by & Winter's passed
That flame of love still burns in my heart
From that Christmas kiss to the autumn bliss
For these last time if you were mine I wished.
Unaware of what future holds
I'm still hoping your heart moulds
In the end, the waves lash & fingers crossed
But that mark on my heart will never be washed..!
A contest entry
- AP FAMILY, FRIENDS & A PARTNER by Angels Delight.
670 points, ended February 26, 2007, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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DQ- should have followed through with the rules. Sadface... -Scion
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Openly honest!
I loved it... it was a journey of the heart! Best wishes in the contest! be well and be safe! Happy Thanksgiving!
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Wow I see you already won a Gold trophy for this brilliant piece!
Written so well!!
This contest is more about the Cheer and the happiness Christmas brings, but please don't remove it. I am sure many people [me included] hardly feel like that this time of year! This is a (Anything goes) contest and I will surely look at it again for the final judging!
Thank you very much for the entry! Please enter again with any other Christmas stories you would like to share.
All the best in the contest!
Take care
Becks -
This is a stunning poem, you have a very interisting way of writing, I like it.
Its truely beautiful words,thrown together to make a even more beautiful poem.thank you for this one.
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Lovely write dear Moksh. you take us through this journey with words as few as these
Keep writing more~ ..And marks are like gems that colour the pages of our lives, making it an interesting album than empty days.. A heartfelt write I enjoyed reading. congratulations on your well deserved trophy 
Someone lucky is out there to bag all these feelings and care- the way you seem to bear for another being ~~~ Tk care~
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hey yeh i had read this but didnt comment at that time....sowwy...i think i had posted my comment on orkut lol......
tis a very lovey dovey piece and as of now am in a mood of some dark poetry lol so my comment wont proved to be the best
but i suggest you to wrk on meters.....like it would sound beautiful if every stanza collabs with other...overall very sweet humble emotions u have penned here
keep going
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Nice piece, I enjoyed reading it.
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Stunning
I am running out of comments today...
Let me first of all say thank you for entering and I so wish you the best of luck
The poem was wonderfully written and I enjoyed it very much
Love ya
Tes
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hi there,
A nice piece.
Wish you luck in the contest.
Shahrzad*rose
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Really good piece. I hope you do well in the contest. - cgirl0410
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nice
sweet and innocently accurate. i realy liked this poem and i wish you the best of luck.
~jalisa
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delicious indeed
well its nice with fine flow you
have done beautiful
good luck in the contest
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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