The bottle's half empty,
And I can tell.
The more I drink,
The more my mind dwells.
On thoughts of him,
I'm starting to crack.
As I put down another,
I'm thrown off track.
Tears start to fall,
For what I keep inside.
You ask if I'll tell...
I've got nothing to hide.
I'm feelin' woozy,
Must be the booze.
I might as well tell you,
I've got nothing to lose.
"When he holds me near,
My heart pounds so hard...
I've never felt the comfort,
I feel in his arms."
"I love him so much,
But he'll never know..."
You keep drying my tears,
As more of my feelings show.
"Every song that I hear,
Reminds me of him..."
I keep on confessing,
While the ground continues to spin.
"I really do want him to know,
Just how much I really care...
But the thought that he'll run,
Is too much to bear."
You tell me to call and tell him,
Or our friendship's through.
You say you're tired of seeing me hurt,
But I can't do what you want me to do.
It's time to lay down,
I've let too much out.
Before you walk out the door,
I pour the last of my heart out...
"I know you are angry,
But I just can't make that call.
I'd rather have him like this,
Than not have him at all."
Author notes
Ummm...this all came from a night that I was wasted. I remember certain bits and pieces of a conversation I was having with a friend of mine...and decided to write about it because this guy is all I ever think about anymore...When I'm drinking I pour everything I'm feeling out when someone is there to talk to...the sad thing is, I can tell everyone except the person this is about...
Please tell me what you think
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doesn't unrequited love just suck? I think the last stanza of the poem hit home for me.
You did a great job expressing yourself and how you felt and that's what made the piece
great job!
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I can really relate to this and I don't just mean the drinking
I've poured my feelings out and it's all coming together now. You never know how he/she may react.
"It's better to regret something you have done, then to regret something you haven't done" That's my life motto and it hasn't let me down so far
Nice poem btw, I love your style. Very good choice of words, flow, rhyme... excellent.
Keep it up !
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WOW... I know this situation oh to well. It is so hard to express your feelings if you are not sure of the other person and you dont want to lose them. It is so sad but so many of do it. Great write..Hope you feel better..
Soulful Woman
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EXCELLENT
very very very great write
I LOVED IT
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"I know you are angry,
But I just can't make that call.
I'd rather have him like this,
Than not have him at all."
Sums up alot of experiences peoplehave in life with partnrs, me included. Thought provoking and well written. -
this is an incredible piece of writing, so deep and emoptional. Have you ever thought about sending a txt msg or a letter or sumthing to him, might be easier.
I respect that you cant tell him and afraid of loosing him, but what if it could be better??
keep on writing and gooodluck in the contest.
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