I stand here all alone
Looking at the world pass by
Sure they take one look at me
And just do their best to ignore me
Everything soon will be fine
I look up in the skies above
With hopeful innocent eyes
But deep down inside
Scared of the clouds of doubt hovering over me
I know I’m very good
Loyalty is my specialty
Trust has never been an issue
My love is unconditional
All the qualities on match.com of perfection
You’ll find easily on my CV
Skeletal bones are protruding
Out of soft supple broken skin
Tear marks are visible around
Beautiful deep eyes sunk in
I wear the tiara of pain
Shining on my soar head
I’ve spilled my guts out to you
Do you even care?
Or listening is not your thing?
Then just take one look at me
Or you rather walk away blind folded?
I don’t have much to live
I’m just grateful to God for this
Anyways, someone once said
Quality of life precede the quantity
So, far all I’ve seen is the painful number
Still have to see the quality of life I’ve been hearing about
Now I’m tired waiting
The sun that was up once in my eyes
Has gone down quickly
Subtracting another day from the quantity of my life
With the hope still clinging at the edge of the cliff
May be there will be another brighter day tomorrow
Once again I talk myself to sleep
So, until that tomorrow when you are ready to listen
You are braver not to walk away from noticing me
You finally get the full picture of my potential
And you are ready to be friends with humanity
I’ll be right here locked behind these wired doors
Being my young loyal hopeful self
Waiting for you to come & get me
To hold me, cherish me until death do us apart
I’ll keep perfecting my tricks to make you laugh
The wet kisses, I’ll try not to let them dry
Unconditional love I have will keep it safe
For you despite of the pain you’ve caused
Until you are ready to be once again
God’s created kind human being
I’ll wait here locked up in one of the dog house
I guess I’m better off than wandering on the streets
Like lot of four-legged babies out there scared all alone
But still want to go back to the safety of a home
Don’t you think, I deserve that?
Author notes
Do you think they desrve this or better??????
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A contest entry
- Aesthetics of Hate by Swintha.
700 points, ended November 23, 2007, 13 entries
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The Whales Sonata [for#1 in this contest] new Received the gold for its phenomenol portrayal of whales mating in contrast with the bloody deaths that they suffer every day. I loved the build up of this daily conflict that whales must face; the dichotomy of their wonderful, peaceful paradise juxtaposed with the sad possibility of their demise if they continue to be hunted the way that they are. This poem won for category #1, as it picked out a cause and portrayed the daily life and struggle of these magnificent mammals of the sea who are the largest sea animal that exists today. The imagery was so real that I could feel, taste, see and touch it through the incredible description that the words created. A Mother at Heart This poem moved me beyond words in it’s a wonderful true story about a lioness’s antics in the way that she adopted baby antelopes instead of eating them. This story won the silver trophy not so much that it was written flawlessly but in how it genuinely and with heartfelt emotion described the life of this legendary lioness who was a Buddha incarnated as a lioness who adopted and sheltered abandoned antelopes even at her own expense. Thats Alright Mama. "My faithful dog Trooper stayed with me throughout my battles with cancer. That dog understood more than most humans do and always knew when" This won the bronze for the 3rd option for pet therapy because it told the true story of a dog who gave his/her master hope and purpose to go on, simply by being there for him/her and loving them unconditionally, as most animals have the capacity to do. There are many stories such as this, and I honored it with the bronze trophy because it portrayed a story that has transpired over and over many times in real life - that animals love and save people all the time and are capable of sentient emotions much the same as humans. I decided to award more honorable mentions than I initially listed. There were so many good entries, it was impossible to only give three honorable mentions. In fact, I wish I could give everyone an honorable mention. They were all amazing, and every one touched me in a special way. I cried, I laughed and I learned from all of you. Thank you my friend for all of your lovely entries and for caring about the animals! I want to take a moment to give special thanks to all of the people who helped with this contest; Thelordreigns, Dark Raven, silverstar2.0 and storiesuntold. Thank you to all of you for your great input and the time that you invested in this worthy cause. Also, I want to give special thanks and honor to the Animal Lover’s Group owner, Debilynn. This contest was done for her, in gratitude and love for keeping this group alive for us. We wish her happiness and well-being and I would like everyone to keep her in their prayers. She has been going through some health hurtles lately, and we hope for her speedy recovery. Do I Deserve This? A very well-written and telling poem about how much dogs suffer who are kept in miserable conditions, such as puppy mills, for dog fighting, even for being eaten! It was so sad how it adeptly portrayed that they go to sleep each night dreaming for a better life. [ f ] [ a ] [ c ] [ t ] [ o ] [ r ] [ y ] For pointing out the atrocities of factory farming and that animals endure unbelievable suffering because they feel like we do. Adopt A Pet: It's better than marriage A really cute story about how having a pet is the next best thing, or sometimes even better, than being married! Homage to Garuda, the Chickadee (Metered Mirror-Rhyme) An adorable tribute to a beautiful bird and all of her endearing qualities. Guardian of the Keep This was delightful in how it portrayed a very busy little pup taking the job of protecting the master’s home very seriously. legislate Made one aware of how much power is in the hands of our legislatures, and what an impact their decisions have on the welfare of animals. "Scrubbing Bubbles" An honorable mention for the cutest write about bathing cats and their antics. The photo says it all! I really related to this. A Cat in This Town Cute and clever perspective of the lives of feral cats; their “upside down” lives. Also, very tragic - but told in a humorous way - if that is possible. Alice "Hello, my name is Alice I visit every week I let kids touch and stroke me because I cannot speak, A very moving poem about pet/dog therapy." Blood Soaked Humanity "Yes I meant to use HELL in the form I did..." Very intense poem about animals who are brutally killed all for their fur or “for the price of ivory” real texas chainsaw "the shackles release her but its not to free her" A very vivid and upsetting poem about how animals suffer when they are slaughtered because THE HUMANE SLAUGHTER ACT is not being enforced by the USDA. It does not spare the reader of the horrid reality of what these poor animals go through. We're Not Gonna Take It! These animals are tired to being tested on.So when Humans threaten their lives and their home they deside to fight back! See what happens I really enjoyed this was about a tale of how a group of animals escaped from an animal-testing laboratory. PETA Stance The cutest poem about PETA (People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals), with quite a twist of humor! A Doggie Dog Life(short Story) A cute tale about how a puppy views things. I would have given more, but I was running out of points. A few of the entries, I was going to give an honorable mention to, but I noticed they had already won an honorable mention. One that I want to give special mention to here is; Black Bear A soulful write about the plight of the Black Bear, and how their home and rights are slowly being taken away from them. I loved the imagery and how the mother bear is portrayed as facing it alone. I loved all of them, and if time allowed I would comment further. All of the entries received a personal comment from me and I appreciate all of the other judges comments as well. Blessing to all of you and PLEASE keep speaking out for those who cannot for themselves!
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I am crying!
So many animals are suffering like this in the world. They did nothing to deserve it. All they feel is unconditional love. They hope and feel just like us humans, and every night they go to sleep dreaming of a better tomorrow, where they will be accepted, loved, given a little attention and care. That's all - not too much to ask in exchange for their unconditional love, affection and protection. Not too much to ask! They all deserve better. This is a very heart-breaking write, that was true and well written. It made me cry, and that is the sign, (to me anyway), of a good piece of poetry.
Thank you for your entry and best wishes in the contest. I appreciate you speaking out for the animals. I pray that one day it will be better for all of them. Blessings - -
a very heart-wrenching write. packed with emotions that touch the senses. dogs are very loyal animals. even the tiniest will try to protect its owner. you are a very talented writer. keep writing! God bless you always
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So sad It makes me cry
Aweful this is that anyone would do this to any animal .If you cant afford to care for a dog then find him a home where they can .Ask a friend for help or whatever it takes but never let them starve and be shackled with nothing .For if a human would do this to an animal they also would do this to another human for they have no concience
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a lot of excess words - the point is strong and fluent but I feel there is no touching metaphor or sadness in words. The background is very distracting - but again - cleverly done.
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"Subtracting another day from the quantity of my life
With the hope still clinging at the edge of the cliff
May be there will be another brighter day tomorrow."
These words spoke out to me the most. Your poem presented a view of society quite different to mine but none the less angry. Good work.
-Swintha
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awww..
i feel bad for all the animal's that get treated like this..
it makes me wanna cry when i see an animal being mistreated >.<
animal's deserve respect just as much as we do,
and people who ARE for the cruelty..i say
F*CK YOU!
anyway, keep this flowing, it's so true..
<3
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i think all animals no matter how lowly we see them deserve respect, i even try to do it with bug, but they tend to creep me out so (trying to throw in a joke there) but in all honesty i think you are right, and this should be something that take a light, keep it flowing
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Beautiful poem... reminds me of a stray a close friend picked up once, loved back to good health, and still has as far as I know. Named him after an aeronautcal intersection over where he was found. I found it all too endearing. Wonderful poem, really took to Dog's view, so to speak. Reminds us of what humanity means.
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My lovely friend, Ramona, used to work at the Humane Society some years ago, and she has also worked at a veterian's office. She was the one who had to put down dogs that could not be saved. It was difficult for her at first, but she fianlly found a rational for it.
When dogs are so abused that they will never recover from the damage, it is necessary and kind to put them down. I sometimes watch the SPCA on Animal Planet. Some of them just make me cry.
This is such a cry for help for these animals, and you are to be commended for your compassion. Hugs, Patricia
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Heartwrenching!!!!!!!!!
Minoo, This is a very heartwrenching piece that you have written here. I am an animal lover and hate to see them mistreated. Dogs do love unconditionally and some get rewarded by kicks or sticks. Some just get abandoned. It is sad to see this in society, we are the human beings and should be smart enough to realize that this unconditional love deserves a good home and a loving family. I commend you for this write and thank you for sharing with all of us. Keep that ink flowing. Kudos for you my dear sweet friend. Love and God bless, Joyce 
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yes an appeal for animals
the writing is very grim and serious and there is intensity throughout..so this is your choice..there are many ways to get the messages out..spay animals..adopt fom the pound... and this strong approach too..your choice.. a well written piece
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Thuis is deep mom. It is so sad and heartwrenching. You moved me to tears.i am sorry to see your hear broken.
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Thanks Baby
Thank you sweetheart for your comment...I hate what we do to our loyal 4-legged babies, it simply disgusts me...I wrote this as I watched the reruns of the ad of innocent eyes behind wires looking with hope to find someone to take them home finally...It just brought tears to my eyes...just thought to share with others...Thanks hun again for stopping by...Take Care & God Bless
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