What is it that draws me
hither and on?
Down this road to nowhere.
I find my life
in contemplation, stuck.
On this road to nowhere.
Have I missed my turn?
Or passed a fork?
On this road to nowhere.
Perhaps I've left behind
what life embodies...
Down this road to nowhere.
Forever in thought,
and rusty gears grinding,
Trying to reach...somewhere.
Movement in place,
wheels fixed and spinning.
Seeking answers...anywhere.
So is it here I will stay
mired in intellect?
On the road to nowhere.
It is here I will abandon
hope for genious?
On the road to nowhere.
Or will deliberation,
and brooding meditation,
foster a path from nowhere?
Perhaps cautious action
and trust in fate's fancy,
will show me my way from nowhere.
As it is, I will stay
until I find a different way,
moving ever on and never to...nowhere.
Hapless strength be my guide,
acute capriciousness of the mind.
These my companions, to nowhere.
Decrepid life I live,
for the artistry that I give.
Down the road to nowhere.
Holding on to the baneful past,
seeking inspiration from death.
Down the road to nowhere.
Author notes
It is indeed metaphorical....well at least it has a deeper meaning to it...but can you figure it out?
I hope that you enjoy reading this as much as I enjoyed creating it.
A contest entry
- The Poets Write by Starrchild777.
975 points, ended March 8, 2007, 18 entries
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I like it, but then I don't
This work starts out nicely, and the first few stanzas are great but then it just starts getting sort of..blugh...you know what I mean? Maybe it's just me having a short attention span, but I expect that other readers might be sharing my thoughts. No big deal, just an observation. Alright, so now that that's over, how bout some praise? Each stanza itself is beautiful, like its own little poem. My faves are 7 and 8.
What a great read! I'd like to see you upload some more poems, because you have a very rare talent for such structured poetry that isn't easily found, especially on a website such as this.
-Samuel Douglas Kendall
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Plodding Poem
It's a little long hmm? Well the way it is written it is supposed to seem like you are on this long road that seems to lead...nowhere...and you are plodding along pondering...and your thoughts seem to spin a little aimlessly.
I have a short attention span too...but then again I wrote it
But I am glad that you liked it
I have never thought of myself as being a structured poet...but haha, I guess I really am.
In the past my work has been more free verse, but obviously my style has changed, and that has been just in the last two years! I am working on getting better, just check back and see if you find anything you like in the future. I'll be returning your comment soon because I love reading other people's stuff. 
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, it makes me happy
-Saralynne
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Having all the tools and knowledge to take us somewhere sometime ends up leading us to nowhere, or at least missing that fork in the road that would have taken us somewhere. Good write and I like your descriptions. Thanks for sharing.
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You are right about that, just being booksmart doesn't always cut it.
Thanks for commenting as always.
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This is truely amazing. I know, i know. I saw that about all your poems. But this one in particular is touching. And yes, I can figure out your metaphore. ^_^
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Hm, I'm glad you find it so amazing and touching...
This one is a but different isnt it.
Thanks for commenting and applausing babe.
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Some people although clever and quick of mind, having everything they need and knowing everything in their work and what drives them, still fail to see their destiny, still fail to see humanity and how beautiful one's destiny can be if we let people inside, to touch us, give love and send love to others. But often we hide inside our safe cocoon and never venture outside.
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Exactly. I have had that trouble all my life...I'm very intellectually smart...but not all that sold on common sense. I've had a hard time coming out from behind my books, and my knowlegde, and my emotions and discovering who I really wanted to be and what I wanted from life period. Some of that is due to emotional hurt of course, but moreso my resistance to taking a chance at life.
Thank you for the applause and comments! I really appreciate it
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