Faces frozen in stone,
the only witnesses to the crime.
Echos of the screams,
would fade slowly over time.
Stolen as they slept,
from their lonely campsite.
I was thrilled when I saw
their eyes widen with fright.
Deeper into the forest,
trapped in their sleeping bags.
I tied both together,
much easier to drag.
Screams filled the night
with such beautiful sounds.
Echoing off the mountains,
in wonderful rebounds.
Soon we did arrive,
at my den of iniquity.
So deep in the forest,
where no one would see.
I strapped him to a tree,
since I adore an audience.
Her I slowly stripped,
with a show of great temperance.
I rekindled the fire,
heating up some of my toys.
Throwing the female to the ground,
I got out my pride and joy.
Securing her between trees,
right in front of the male,
I got the red hot brand,
laughing, I saw her face pale.
What wonderful screams,
and the fragrance of burning skin.
The male tried to escape,
so I secured him once again.
Then her silence became a bore,
so I decided it was his turn.
After I cut him from the bag,
I laid her in the fire to burn.
I cut some intricate patterns,
into the males hairless chest.
His screams fueled my muse,
so I gave him my very best.
Blood flowed so wonderfully,
highlighting every small detail.
The smell of burning flesh,
delighted me without fail.
Such a magnificent masterpiece,
was a shame to have to destroy.
So I took pictures of my carvings,
which I'd later enjoy.
This was a rewarding evening,
not one I would soon forget.
I thought as I cleaned up,
this might be the best night yet.
Author notes
6) Write a poem describing a murder or torture scene.
A contest entry
- The Darkest Day by Baahltres.
2000 points, ended February 13, 2007, 33 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Murderous, Gruesome, Sick, Twisted....... by Synthetic-Nightmare.
1600 points, ended June 8, 2007, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Wickedly bloody murder by Megan Awesome.
600 points, ended June 21, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
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Please tell me what you think
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weird but intense, some of the stanzas are worded in a bit confusing way though. thank you for entering and good luck
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Previous comments are correct -- what makes this SO creepy is the picture of beautiful nature at the top -- what an absolute twist to the mind, then, to read down and realize what's happening... as gory as possible, and I suspected really fits the prompt!!! .. Um, the rhymes are good, too.
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wow now dat was very kool i loved it. You did an excellent job thanks for the entr
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You have to be one messed up person to write something like that. And thats a compliment coming from me lol. I really enjoyed reading it. It flowed really well and it freaked the hell outta me. Thank you for entering and good luck!!!
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HAHA!
WANNA KNOW WHAT MAKES THIS POEM CREEPY?? The friggen background, one would open it up to read it thinking it was a nice story, and then instead you get thsi. THIS IS AMAZING! KUDOS AND CONGRATS! FUCKIN AWESOME! Very brutal
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What a disturbed mind someone like this would master! I love the imagery though and how you let us know you are the person coming this crime in the second stanza/third stanza.
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hides behind a pillow shaking peeks ova the top to see if the horror movie finish yet lol ...good luck in the contest .... smiles ~cheeky~
xXx
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Sorry hun! Got a
for ya. I just love horror stories, I just couldn't resist! Thanks for stopping by and for the great graphic for my page! I love it!
Jeannie
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you got one sick and twisted mindset girl and to think you did all this without at least asking if there was anyone else who wanted to join in your fun......damn it this bad girl would have joined in the hunt
thought i was in for a special night but not the night of nights....horror chilled mmmmmmmmmm so what do i think....brilliant the stuff night terrors are made of...go you good bad girl...please put a warning on in future so i can turn out the lights first and try to feel it down to the bone, a pleasure....
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Whew wee!!!
Ooh silence of the lambs comes to mind...lol Umm, this was different...I thought it was a nature poem, then I thought it was erotica, then wow! ha ha Good job it was amazingly frieghtful! Scared the s**t out of me anyway!
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Is it a bad thing that this made me happy? lol, but seriously, you did a wonderful job bringing out the joy the attacker was feeling. The description was wonderful. Well done!
Thank you for entering and good luck!!!
~.~Yvonne~.~
Baahltres
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