you show me swan lake
when you pas de deux
& I hear castanets click
to your flamboyant flamingo
oh you dance my day
with sway of hip
dance with me
the fandango
let's feather motions
across this floor
moving to whatever beat
that lifts the feet
& makes the heart skip
then dance with me
the tango
Author notes
#option picture 8.NB This is an anonymous contest entry,if you comment please don't use my name,many thanks indeed.
A contest entry
- Picture leakage by Vernal.
550 points, ended March 6, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I think you captured the spirit of the picture well in this. I found it interesting that you went with several different dances rather than focus on just one. It gives the impression that you were spotlighting the feel of the image rather than the image itself. One question though, did you mean "flamingo" the bird in L4 or "flamenco" the dance?
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Ah dancing under the moonlight with a gentle breeze fragant filled air in the arms of the one who holds your heart ..... I felt a real good feeling reading your poem as the picture they painted I felt i was swaying and twriling in step with your words. the imagery and flow and the emotion of the dances works well. Thank for the pleasure of the dance. Nicely penned.
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sweet
this is really goood , i really enjoyed it. good luck in the contest, hope you win!!!!!
lots o' love,
-gooshawn <3 xoxoxoxoxoxoxo
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I hear the rythem of soft drums and a spanish guitar..Ole`. LOL. Fun write and fun to read. Hope you do well in the contest.
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This is truly a lovely write isn't it? The girl who happens to be in this photo would like it very much.
"& I hear castanets click
to your flamboyant flamingo
oh you dance my day
with sway of hip"
I absolutely love these lines my dear. 'Tis a great entry, thank you very much.
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the fandango
let's feather motions
across this floor
moving to whatever beat
that lifts the feet
you have described a picture ...but that picture has inspired here a poetry..and poetry has made a stand of the sentiments of your heart...and this traingle is the truth of life ..I really appreciate this poem.. a great attempt is here..
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