Just people are we
all of us lost
drowning in life, our merciless sea
bittersweet, each wound burns
salty liquid crystals parch our tongues
sick & weary from the motions
the pulling, yanking and tossing us all about
the wild waters raging with a scream and a shout
roaring, heaving in our ears
deafening the plain truths yet,
yeilding to silence the treasonry of lies
tangled we are
each a tragedy in our own, bound by skin
swimming aimlessly looking for the pieces
waiting to restart our lives over once again
Please tell me what you think
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"A BRILLANT WORK OF ART"
WOW, yet another brillant piece of poetry which illustrates the immerse talent you possess.
The concept is at first eluded, however, as the reader reads further, the interpretation and message you convey, slowly, but surely emerges.
i also love your use of personfication "the wild waters raging with a scream and a shout"....... magnificent imagery used.........
SIMPLY BRILLANT CHELSY.........
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very good dearest sweethearted friend of mine
this is really good i see the reasons the pain
everything pouring in my eyes its great keep it up hon -Kevin
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very good
reminds me of a poem by Robert Bly; I could send it to you if you'd like
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Thanks for the comment. Glad you liked it. Sure i'd like to read that poem by Robert Bly, I've never heard of him or read any of his work. Thanks for the comment! I really appreciate it.
Lovey
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