I got over her not long after she was gone
And still those goddamn dreams live on
Swallow what you've eaten but the taste remains
So it is with past loves' stains
This love is long fucking past
But these goddamn hopes always last
She matters to me no more
But still I haven't shut that door
Holding on to loves' dreams
As they tear at my hearts seams
So unable to ever forget
Once in my heart love's been let
Can't find a way to fucking heal
Or change this lonely way I feel
So now I stand in my tears rain
Wallowing in yesteryear's fucking pain
A contest entry
- Dark Love by loveaswellashate.
393 points, ended February 20, 2007, 13 entries
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To feel or not to feel...
Hell Yeah! I can so fuckin relate to this! And I have a good idea who you wrote this about... Sometimes I wish that when the relationship ends all of the pain and emotion goes with them, and I can free myself of thier memory...I know exactly how you feel with this one! Great Write!
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love and loss and longing...nice poem with good rhyme
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This is one FINE exapmle of Dark Love and the pain it subsequently cause...oh how we long to rip the pain from our heart.....I know and feel your pain, through osmosis babe....
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Wicked
This is truly one of your best *in my opinion*. Love the line "Swallow what you've eaten but the taste remains", it's incredibly true. Amazing write mun.
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hell ya bro, i really like this poem. it is so true as to how longe loves pain can hurt. it is also a beautiful thing as you have shown in other poems. but often as not it hurts like hell. and last for a long freakin time.
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Shit man, seems we have a lot in common, haha. I have felt this way before too, and I still do. Its really hard to rinse out that taste of something so sweet even though you don't want it anymore. Very nice write!
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this i sad but you express ur feelings expressively in this piece this is one of the best pieces i have eva read
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I like this. Once open it can't be undone. I hate when that happens. Memories always get the best of us. Great work. lol
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So good. As said in the previous comment, you placed the profanity very well- emphasizing, but not overbearing. Great piece. Very bitter and painful, as well as, unfortunately, very relatable. You've done an amazing job with this as always!!!
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I like this.. great emotion.. and nice usage of the cuss words.. it made the poem.. i think.. that much better... thanx for entering.. and good luck..
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Sad
I'm sry you cant forget about her. That sucks, you must've really loved her. I liked this though. lots of pain.
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