sleep
tortures
constantly;
I can't escape
riven memories
adumbrated by you;
even coruscating stars
and Luna's sedative magic
cannot banish the travails I face
each night I must repatriate my dreams
Author notes
the only way I will be able to eventually rid of my sadness is to purge it...and so, here I am. I hope this will be acceptable.
In a list
A contest entry
- Let the Picture Inspire... by Mad Moon.
525 points, ended February 17, 2007, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I really love your word usgae, it's so.. amazing and just well placed. The emotion in this is so over-whelming. I can relate so well. Congrats on the silver.
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wow! Drew me in with the title, being an insomniac! And this is an amazing piece. I think I may try out this form for your contest, but I can't promise anything haha... I have been having muse issues lately! ;p
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You have a knack for vocab, that's for sure and the trophy is well deserved. It seems, to me, the dreamer has the last word, after all politics, beyond any economic, farther than all artistic endeavor - the dreamer always has the last word. may your efforts at purging be rewarded with peace. Blessings and best wishes, ~richard
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this has winner written all over it and the host saw that.you are a master of words.even as one rushes for the dictionary, you feel that you have been graced with royalty because your words are gold.
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Indeed, I can relate to this. And well penned w/ good use of words. -theQueen"
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Timeless
This piece is simply riveting and deeply soul-stirring. Keep ripping it up -
You really show your talent with this form Raven. This is sad but beautifully expressed and presented. Excellent job here Lil' Sis'. Congratulations on winning the Silver! Well deserved indeed!
Always ♥
Renee
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A very well written etheree. I too love this form. There is something about the overall shape of it that brings a certain punch into play. Your words, however are the biggest star here. Very emotional and deep. Good luck in the contest.
~Lyrical
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An outstanding piece of work my sweet Raven... your words are excellently chosen! I have missed your writings as of late... You inspire many and this my dear one is golden! Mary makes contests "fun" huh? You take care and always a pleasure to drop by your pages! Much love, and many hugs your way, Annie
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Powerful-
Powerful etheree Mom
So glad to see You picked up the quill again~
I remember having to do some purging and writing
does wonders with release~
Wish You nothing but Happiness and I'm here
for You whenever You need to talk~
You are a Blessing
to me and all those
around You!!
Many blessings to You in the contest
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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This is an wonderful etheree. I've been waiting for someone to enter a 'form' poem. The verbiage in this is simply stellar! Also, all the raw emotion instilled in this can't help but be "felt" by the reader. I like the different approach you took, as well. Refreshingly original, and very well done. Thanks for entering this beauty, and good luck!
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Sensational!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Raven, The beauty which only your pen can produce a write so deep and emotional. You wrenched my heart beyond belief with this sad and yet beautiful masterpiece that you penned for all of us to gaze upon. Words spoken from a true sage. I send you love and light to perhaps give some relief to the pain felt. Your verbiage that is majestic creates a story that only a poet's heart can see. I wish you the best of everything in life and for this contest. Kudos on this brilliant write that sounds golden to me. Love and God bless, Joyce 
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This is really, really good. Wasn't sure of a few words but I looked them up. And this is just most definitely totally awesome!
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Beautiful
I love this Raven. Beautifully written as you always do. Great Job.
*Go with God* my friend,
Valerie
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