The end is near, it's closing in,
I know it's wrong, a horrible sin.
But being me, just one more day,
Just doesn't make me want to stay.
So I'll leave here cold and fast,
A silent haze, or solid blast.
You'll feel much better, when I'm gone,
You'll smile and laugh and have some fun.
I wish I'd never caused you pain,
I know you hate me in your brain.
Since I'll never know your pure love,
I'll send my soul to god above.
But leaving won't erase my past,
You'll thank the lord, he's gone at last.
You deserve the best, thats why go,
I'll miss you more than you'll ever know.
A contest entry
- Just flow and let yourself go. by Blueskywonder.
1200 points, ended February 9, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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sad.. real life though, been in this situation, it's always hard.. good write, and congrats on the honorable mention!!
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I really like your poems, I think they're no-nonsense, good solid poems with good rhymes and good stories (im not very imaginative with my adjective am i..) but yeah another sadly sweet poem, well done x take care x
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This is a very emotional piece of poetry in which you have managed to express clearly you sorrow for another, a truly touching piece.Well done and thankyou for entering my competition.Good luck.
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Really good, Ive been there so many times I really do know how it feels
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Really good write. Sad though, and I doubt they'd be happier with you gone. Just because you hurt someone doesn't mean they will not forgive you. Strongly written with such emotion to make me feel deep inside my heart. Well done. Samantha
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Another brilliant write by you. I like the way you penn. It is easy to understand but very effective. a sad piece indeed done in raw emotion.
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Good job with expressing depression. It is a very sad poem which at some time I hope turns into a happy ending. Time heals all, I know. I had my own mother wish that I would cut deeper. For a long time it really hurt. But time seemed to make it better and eventually I could accept her appoligy. So hang in there. You sound like your a kind, caring, sensitive individual. Hang in there and move on away from this person that has nothing to offer you.
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I don't think anyone could think that way about you.. and thank the lord you are gone.
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