I can't help to love you
I can't help but look into your eyes
I can't help but slice you
And dice you up inside.
I love the little drip
The little splatter of blood
I love to take a sip
And taste all of your pain
I can't help but scratch you
I can't help but smile at your screams
I can't help but hurt you
And watch you wallow in this misery
Your pain makes me smile
Though a sinister smile is shown
I love the color of all the blood
And the sound of that shreik I make known
I can't help but kill you
Slowly through your pain
I can't help but make you cry
And make you die in this rain
I can't help but want you
Forever and here to stay
I can't help but trap you here
So your soul will forever remain.
Author notes
I can't help it, I love monkeys!
A contest entry
- Bloody Valentine! by One Eunique Pixie.
750 points, ended February 14, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Okay
I liked the all over feel of death and destruction. This is what I wanted. The blood was a bit much for my tastes, but whatever floats your boat. I loved the first stanza. The flow was very good, and I thank you for being the first non freeverse in my dang contest. Much appreciated. Just a quick question, what is a shreik ? Cause you lost me there...lol. Ok well over all a nice piece. Two thumbs up and all that. Thanks for sharing.
Good Luck in my Contest!
Love and Peace, Charlene. -
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the shreik
Basically the line with the shreik was suppose to say that I made him scream out in pain.
But I was trying to make it rhyme too, so that's what happened. ;-;
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