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The Poet, the Pen and the Forgotten Words



 

 

The Poet considers incongruity

of paper versus pen

both have parity

dependent on the truth

& observed from nearness of skin

human; places often travelled

inside the poet's mind

treasures, trinkets, and triumphs to be found

in boxes

in jars

in the lofty spaces-

                              [is that heaven, she asks?]



 

- She writes of hope; health

   & cliched happiness

   of regret,

when the ink spooled from a plea

to another, such as she

becomes her fingers

becomes her hand

becomes her arm-

synaptic sparks invade a restless reflex

her mind cascades with pure light

 

 

             What is this flagellant child that lives in the poet?

 



 

wounds open to beauty and pain

the true aspersion of a moment

uttered from soft lips

a contradiction of what should be written

and what should be spoken- out-loud from mountains

valleys of riverdeep sex

shattered orgasms speak in languages forgotten

by man & beast

the curve of hip and thigh

divide to the eye of him



 

She wept once;

when reading Russian translated poetry

asphyxiated illusions of love and hope

screwed on the floor

paper

paper

scissors

& stone



 

               The poet climbs the stairs

               unlocks the bedroom door

               lays on the bed

               & wonders why

               the ink stains her hands so

 






 



 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    April 11, 2008

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    What a fantastic piece of poetry. 'Bookmarked' indelibly, so I can return to fathom further tastes of 'such as this'.
    What needs to be said, it's simply to be read!


    • NurseChilly gold member
      April 12, 2008
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      thank you, You!! it was also amazing hearing you read this ...

      touched my heart

      thank you again

      G.x


  • michael thomas gold member
    October 22, 2007
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    true ravish/word lavish


  • ReEvaluated
    September 7, 2007

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    "wounds open to beauty and pain

    the true aspersion of a moment

    uttered from soft lips

    a contradiction of what should be written

    and what should be spoken- out-loud from mountains

    valleys of riverdeep sex

    shattered orgasms speak in languages forgotten

    by man & beast

    the curve of hip and thigh

    divide to the eye of him"

    My favorite part and beautiful down to every syllable. You did a brilliant job conveying a poets mind/feelings while creating a piece of poetry. Wonderful piece.


  • JinSays gold member
    September 6, 2007

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    All I can say, which is rare for me, is WoW!
    Oh, I am blown away!
    It's a good indication of why I will never ever win gld.
    Fabulous,
    Jin


  • Swangrnv gold member
    September 6, 2007

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    a great piece

    very powerful,and it filled my mind with imagery.I realize this was done a long ways back, but congrats on the gold!


  • Son of the Moon
    September 6, 2007

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    this is hands down the best thing ive ever seen you write. it's got some formatting issues, that i'd continue to tweak, if it were me. but kudos. =)


  • Dalaney gold member
    September 5, 2007
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    exquisite poetry...
    love, lane


  • raggyann
    September 5, 2007
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    amazing
    i like all of this beautifuly written poem
    it was outstanding

  • karaharapriya silver member
    September 5, 2007

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    Awesome

    It is like the pen has become a razor cutting into skin and dissecting the inner workings. Beautiful and somehow haunting.

  • garde a l eau
    August 8, 2007

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    ...and then there are those of us who dream of putting pen to paper, of leaving words to weave emotions just so someone will know we also once breathed on the earth, but the language is just too simple or never was there to begin with...that special inflection of thought manifesting enough art to deserve the title of Poetry. This touches the heart of it and leaves my blue eyes green. Wow!


  • Balldinger silver member
    July 11, 2007
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    conked and warbled...

    stepping between the seen and the unseen, I hear you writing and there's not much room for impenetrable thoughts now. you've stoked the aroma with and and burning pages here, Nurse. may all the forgotten words find their appropriate places... ~EZB


  • Centricity
    May 10, 2007
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    I... have no words. This was one of the most beautiful things I've ever read. That is all.


  • Yimmy
    March 13, 2007
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    My favorite poem on this site thus far.


  • katfair
    February 17, 2007

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    her mind cascades with pure light

    What is this flagellant child that lives in the poet?

    wounds open to beauty and pain

    gorgeous lines
    the whole poem is stunning and
    there are fragments of it
    or I could say shards
    or prisms
    that collect light on their own
    make up a whole journey on their own
    I love that about words
    one
    "flagellant" can get a reader on her own quest for days
    in a-Musing query,

    such the writer you are Gill,
    you have an array of styles and forms

    like rock paper scissor
    a different touch for different subjects

    congrats on gold
    kat


  • babypunk13
    February 17, 2007
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    good write i like it

  • LadyLoutenant
    February 15, 2007
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    I love how I have to read your poetry more than once to really get my mind thinking and transfixed on what it may mean. I appreciate how you must have seriously put your talent forward and your mind toward this and all your work.

    Amazing.


  • jantastic gold member
    February 15, 2007
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    .


  • Utok Bulinaw
    February 13, 2007
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    A very reflective write Ms. Chilly. Happy Valentine's Day! R


  • cvillelisa
    February 13, 2007

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    Probably wouldn't surprise you that for me it was the She wept once at Russian poetry line that grabbed me too. Such a very concrete image. And halting there among the floating words and ideas.

    You guys play rocks, scissors paper? -- your lines reminded me of that. Rocks paper scissors -- to decide things. That concept of deciding things fits there in this poem for me. What we set out to write is not often what we end up with writing. We have to just let it go though don't we?

    Congrats on the gold and poem gifts are always a big special treat.

    Lisa


    • NurseChilly gold member
      February 13, 2007
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      i think like poetry... that game is universal hun... hehehheh

      so yes.... we do play it...
      and thank you


  • gullionmar
    February 12, 2007
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    well written


  • Catressa gold member
    February 12, 2007
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  • Dalaney gold member
    February 10, 2007
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    I can see why this one gold. Again, you have created a masterpiece of poetry, and I am just amazed. I love this poem...the ending gave me a lump in my throat. This rarely happens with me. Love, Lane


  • Nicolette gold member
    February 10, 2007

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    Philosophical, deep, contemplative, reflective, nostalgic...and wonderful poetry - this the impression this poem leaves with me, Gill.

    I so loved the line "What is this flagellant child that lives in the poet?" - and then in the last stanza when she looks at her hands...wondering how it came there... Made me think of a cinquain I wrote called "fragment"...as one poet and poem, pen and eye; yet only a fragment of the self falls on these lines".

    You made us see the poet, see into her and made us part of her thoughts...something we can all relate to so very well. And the part about the paper, scissors, stone is just amazing. Beautiful, heartfelt poetry, my friend - and indeed of gold status!

    ~ Nicolette


  • Emerald13
    February 9, 2007

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    the whole is gorgeous ... (yum) ... this, i love ...

    a contradiction of what should be written

    and what should be spoken- out-loud from mountains

    valleys of riverdeep sex

    shattered orgasms speak in languages forgotten

    by man & beast

    the curve of hip and thigh

    divide to the eye of him





    She wept once;

    when reading Russian translated poetry

    sooooo fabulously done ! >>> Gina


  • OutOfSight
    February 9, 2007
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    Poetic philosophy at it's finest!

    Excellent writing.

    Karin


  • Wandika gold member
    February 9, 2007

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    Very good

    I loved this one. You put a lot of thought into this one Gil. Others see the same way and a gold award too. Perfect.

  • Suzanne Dia
    February 8, 2007

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    "She wept once;
    when reading Russian translated poetry
    asphyxiated illusions of love and hope
    screwed on the floor
    paper
    paper
    scissors
    & stone"

    My favorite stanza of anyone's in quite a long time, Gill. It says a lot. I can see why this won gold. Your poetry lately..breathes a sadness that most will never take the time to spot in your eyes...love found and lost..lost and found love. I may have to write some of it, too....but it's as beautiful as that last exhausted sobsigh after a really good cry.


  • Night Hope gold member
    February 8, 2007

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    "- She writes of hope; health
    & cliched happiness
    of regret,
    when the ink spooled from a plea
    to another"

    Ahhh, Gill...This is such a beautifully intense & profound penning, my Friend...I actually read it last night, but didn't have time to comment...I did, however, send it to G. ~ since he can't access it, I wanted to be sure he saw it...What a wonderful portrayal of the writer's life, dear Lady...Sighhh...You know I love my Hope & ampersands, as well...Congratulations on your golden chalice, Sweetie...Carol loved it, I know... Wanda


  • Lute
    February 8, 2007

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    She wept once;

    when reading Russian translated poetry

    asphyxiated illusions of love and hope

    screwed on the floor

    paper

    paper

    scissors

    & stone


    this poem by itself, bestest poem too.

    the flagellent child, like dat! Where dat Claire!
    Uh oh now me in trouble,

    The Poet considers incongruity
    of paper versus pen


    Heh! anything not to write anything down.

    Yes yes I tardy. All dat worms fault, since he plays hooky all de time, I get off scot free.

    What continent he on today one wonders?

    oopsers off the beaten track,
    weren't we taling about Poemers? Where dey come from I wonders? Out dere in dere round the corner? what we need with dumb old poemers anyways? Guess I know, but I ain't saying--once upon a time and all, but then the page gor filled with all these squiggles,

    It's like the story of gilgamesh that they had to tell, or odysseus, what is one man, is he all men?
    (the nearness of skin)
    but not nearly so dependent on truth as it is on Truth, which is very hard to find but which endures from age to age, unlike truth which is the price of bubblegum, yesterday.


    Hence, Poet & not poet. think of him as failure in expectations as yet unfulfilled. Or her as the case may be.

    Indeed, yes, Lady, that is heaven


    • NurseChilly gold member
      February 9, 2007
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      i hate dat work, when work sucks and keeps from reading of the poetry and plumery

      but tha's got a reply from dat lute man with strange guitar name and stranger still it be very nice too... which is de dog's bollocks..



      mad fer it... ...

      salt and vinegar



      Thank you guitar man.... i appreciate your lovely lovely lovely words... really i do.. (gobsmacked infact)


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    February 8, 2007
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    wow....this is perfection....it peels back tender places in this poet. When I grow up, I want to write perfection like this. It pulls, it tugs, it pushes the reader, the writer, into knowing something very deep and dear..... powerful...simply perfectly powerful.


  • truembrace
    February 8, 2007

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    How I wish I could capture something of such depth and not lose my readers like you do with the timelessness of such a piece. I read this and am glued to the details, the stress on some of your verses with the beginning line repetition. Again, I found myself thinking "I wish that came so easily to me" as well.

    Such a great great poem. I'm so glad that you indulge in free writes as you do. There are so many stories to be told...

    - Kimmmie

    • NurseChilly gold member
      February 8, 2007
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      bless you Kimmie... I appreciate your lovely words and support...




  • Soulful Woman silver member
    February 7, 2007

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    This was really a masterpiece of words and style.
    I have not tried this style but I do admire those that can and you have done it justice. A great piece.
    Soulful Woman


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    February 7, 2007

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    I see this contest hasn't been judged yet. I can quite safely wish you the best of luck in this contest without looking at any of the other entries. This poem has the chops to Win, Place or Show, and if not here, somewhere. It's a piece that's not gaudy with its vocabulary but not short on it either. It is coherent with just enough cryptic wanderlust to make it a pleasant yet unpretentious read. What more can I say? I hope you place!


  • Annalise
    February 7, 2007

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    I have to agree that this just very well may be your best...

    I love ampersands, too. They rank right up there with the comma.


  • The Bear
    February 7, 2007

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    It make me think of Leonard Cohen- maybe it is the fingers, hand arm part bring him to mind, then the other thoughts. I think this is one of your best.


  • queenie
    February 7, 2007

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    this is free verse as only you can pen it.this goes beyond beautiful to me.it is so deep-reaching.it grabbed my soul.there is something about this that is haunting in such a serene way.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    February 7, 2007
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    we were talking in work about Opus Dei and the self flagellation... ... a client asked what it meant.. so we googled the word on their computer... and found all the versions of it.. .. it is a great word.. flagellant..



    thank you hun....

  • Trew
    February 7, 2007
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    beautiful


  • misselaineous
    February 7, 2007

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    is that heaven she asks?
    this poem is
    you have taken me on a wonderous rollercoaster of emotion here
    Loved this write in it's entirety
    flaggelant and aspersion are stunning words
    thank you for sharing
    i am seeing a lot of third person writing these days and i do like it!

  • Anno
    February 7, 2007

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    Awesome!!!

    Everyone, who takes up the task of writing, for whatever reason, can definitely relate to this piece of writing. How does the saying go,..."roses need water, like the poet needs the pain, the dessert needs the rain"...good one. Bravo!!!

  • darrylblacksr
    February 7, 2007

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    beautiful poem

    I know that all poets feel that way, especially when they create a picture to tell the imagery they want seen at that specific time or place. To me poetry is like the air we breathe and without air we can't breathe... Thank you for sharing it with me. Good luck in your challenge!


  • ca ne fait rien
    February 7, 2007

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    This is certainly A WRITE.

    "What is this flagellant child that lives in the poet?"
    Magnificent line.



  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    February 7, 2007
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    Fabulous.

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